I'm really enjoying this! I like how you're building their relationship--it's very sweet. Can't wait for your next update.

Very very awesome! I love the character development! Poor Marie. I always thought that Marie's skin accidentally turning on while she's getting turned on was a very good, very real risk. It seems like it would respond to a surge in hormones and emotion...and whoa...Logan kissing...now that causes a surge in hormones!

“He’s a big boy; he can take care of himself, even if he does have to have a four hour nap to do it.” – hahaha – love your portrayal of Jubilee!

“You’re urm, very intimidating when you’re this close. Do you know that, has anyone ever mentioned it before?” – lol – I just bet he is, but wouldn’t you just love it? :-)

Okay, so that's me caught up, adoring it and looking forward to the shower scene...!

well, this one was definitely rushed. The bedroom scene needs a LOT of work -- very awkward, those jumps in mood -- and the resolution of their little conflict was entirely too pat.

The jubi/marie convo also was not quite right.

Author's Response: Hiya thanks for the fb. Although I have to say it wasn't rushed (check the dates between updates). I'm trying to portray a couple who have trust, loneliness and self esteem issues, among other things, lol. Most people I know with these particular problems have quick flash moods, they jump between them, they are easily convinced about something or someone and then easily jump right back in doubt. This couple is surrounded by doubt, Marie desperately wants to be trusted and to fit in quietly; Logan desperately wants to find someone he can trust, but the self hatred and military in him (and Scott) keeps bringing up all the bad possibilities that he simply can’t ignore. Hope this gives a better perspective on the chapter. As for Jubes/Marie, it’s not quite right because it’s awkward, it’s meant to not be quit right. Much Love. Smjl47.

Aww come on Wolvie don't listen to Scooter.