Your story is very cute. It put a smile on my face. My only suggestion for you would be to experiment with how you narrate your story. In this story you have taken a more limited approach to writing internal thoughts and events. You did a great job with it, but it might be fun for you to try to expand on having characters experience the moment, and not just tell us about it. I'm not sure if that made sense. Feel free to ask me if you're confused! Thanks for sharing, again, very cute story.