This was beautiful; their first tme was the perfect blend of sexy, tender, and sweet.

This was a great chapter to read. Logan's frustration with the students and his narrative are hilarious. And the part where he doesn't know how to deal with Marie being sick is funny, too-- especially when he thinks he is supposed to get her root beer.

The part in the end where each sentence begins with "I wonder why..." And then we come to the conclusion with "Oh. *Oh*"--love that! I swear my insides got all tickly and squishy when I read that.

You have such a gift with words!

Wow. This fic. So gorgeous, so many great shippy, sweet, funny (the revenge on bobby and Scott's reaction had me nearly busting a gut!) and angsty moments. And that ending - nearly turned me into a total basket case. I'm not sure how I would have reacted if the ending hadn't been so happy. Just an amazing fic, So glad I discovered it!

Okay, so you know how much I love 'Overlap' and 'Heal Over', right? So I needed cheering up this afternoon and I noticed there's a story of yours I'd not read (how I missed it I have no idea!). Honestly, I have so much to do today, but I couldn't tear myself away from this once I'd started. Put simply, it's another brilliant piece of writing. You can imagine I have so many lines I want to quote, but it might freak you out if I copy and paste your entire story here in this review, so I've picked out a few:

"Baby-sitter," I repeat, baffled at the depth of poor judgement those words imply. - ha ha ha!

It's wonderful how expressive Cyke's face can be, even with his eyes covered. I bet he's just itching to take off those glasses, just for a moment. I wonder if I could take it. - great line, made me grin stupidly at the laptop (hubby thinks I've gone insane...maybe I have?)

I kiss the top of her head and tell Marie the truth, the only thing that comes to my mind. "I think you're perfect, Kid." - awwww - so sweet!

In the afternoon I spend a few hours in the garage, go for a ride on the bike, or watch football in the lounge. Economically, any of the previously mentioned activities can be done while pissing off Scott. - I always love a bit of Logan's Scott-bashing and you do it perfectly!

Ain't it strange, when your claws just pop out, without you meaning to? Well, I suppose you wouldn't know. - hahahaha!

Apparently you shouldn't tie a student to the wing of the Blackbird and threaten castration. Iceboy's a little squealer. - love it!

I adore the ending of chapter eight - "I want you," I whisper, just in case she need clarification.

Chapter nine is hot - "I swear, if she backs out now I will die-healing factor or no." - Anyway, has someone turned the temperature up in my house??

Xavier bites off each carefully-scripted declaration, as if struggling to contain himself. - love this description.

Phew! Right, I'll get back to real life now and stop stalking you... :-)

Author's Response: What a great surprise! Thank you so so so much.I love getting reviews for older fics; its like finding Christmas presents when you didnt know it was winter. Believe me, if this is how you do it, please stalk away. (Huh. Dont find myself saying that alot.) Im glad you liked it....I dont know why Im so mean to Scott. I actually like the guy! If it werent for Logan, Id have a crush on him(but then I wouldnt have seen xmen fifty times)....its just so fun! Thanks again, and Merry Christmas! :~)

YAY! happy ending.

seriously i really wish Jean would stop being such a harpy BITCH and just leave Rogan alone. and god, the professor is just soooo snoopy. even my own mother got her nose out of my bedroom business once i turned 18 LOL!

loved this story! glad Logan's taking her with him...they can't ever be apart now.

and screw the sanctimonious X-men and their prudery.

I love your interpretation of Logan - his inner voice and his thought process along the journey to realization.

Loved the little reminders along the way of things said and seen in the past, sometimes this tends to be overdone – I think you got the balance just right especially with ‘so cold...no heart beat...so cold...’ and variations thereof.

You did really well integrating scenes we know into your story without feeling like a written version of the films. – not as easy as some would think!


Not many I give special mention to for titles but yours deserve it. Great concept and well thought out and I really thought you kept your chapters true to them without loosing any of the rhythm of your story.


Loved –

The gentleness at the beginning ‘I can't quite get Westchester out of my head. I find it cropping up in my mind at random times’

Using anger as an excuse at why he’s fed up with the old routine and then at the end of his rant almost as an afterthought you add ‘I haven’t sent anything to Marie in a while’ - perfect timing to throw that thought in, even if for Logan there’s no comprehension of what it means yet.

The protectiveness shining out in chapter 4 - ‘Yeah, son. You're no match for me. Just get out of the ring. Not that we're competing’

Chapter 7 A.K.A, the Wondering Chapter – realization hammered home - brilliant ending!

Chapter 9 – gets a title shout all of its own! Short, sharp, quick paced sentencing - wonderfully written.

Chapter 10 – from the way the Prof used Logan’s feelings at the beginning, and the fact that I hate Jean anyway, knew they wouldn’t let it lie but I struggle with the American version of ‘too young’ (in England the age of consent is 16) – that being said I understand the reason for it, If the age of consent is 18 then 17 is too young just like 15 would be over here. Now for the ending- which has confused me even after re-reading it! (maybe it’s my age!!)

Was he leaving with the engagement a promise to come back or was she going with him?

Very well done, a great paced fic that was thoroughly enjoyable to read x

Author's Response: I read your review. Then I read it again. And again. And then I calmly stood up, brushed off my jeans, and performed something resembling a Victory One-Woman Breakdance, complete with a thrown-back head and shouts of joy. Thank you. Thank you thank you. I rarely get one so thorough and kind.....In answer to your question, Marie leaves with him. I was semi-worried people would think he was going away without her, but any attempt I made to explain just ended up sumarizing. I trusted that reader's could imagine it for themselves, or choose whichever ending he prefered. But I am happy you asked. Again, thank you.

Love the twist. His nervousness was about the proposal, not the leaving. Outstanding. Your Logan has been one of my absolute favorites I have ever read. And your Jean inspired a deeper murderous rage in me than most, too. Heh, heh. This whole story was a joy to read, which probably means it was not easy to write. Congratulations on finishing it. Now let's see what else you've got! --Wendie

Lovely :-D Jeans a scabby old bitch. xXx

Author's Response: Agreed. :)

It was good, really good. nice to show how gentle logan can be with her. keep it up i want update soon plz and ty

i really like the quick phrasing and phrase fragments...it really shows the pace of their movements, the rising tension, the difficulty to be restrained.

i think it was reeeeeally hot!

Holy Flippidyistypickle! For someone who hasn't written something like this before you did a wonderful job! Just the right blend of...ahem.."action" & sweetness.

Gotta love the shout out to what should be the world's most appropriate euphemism too ;P

Author's Response: >bows< I'm so happy you agree with the euphamism.

I'm a pervert, a bastard, a lech. Hell, a thousand names but they all add up to animal.

I truely love that line. A lot. I think this was my favorite chapter. Love the playdough legs. Love that it didn't take 17 chapters after he realised things for him to say something. I loved her response. Absolutely perfect. So glad I tried out this story. It's beautiful.

~Mia