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Date: 09/10/2010 9:01:49 AM Title: Chapter 33
That low down, no good, conniving BEE- YATCH!!!! Ohhhhhhh she is so gonna pay!! Tell us she's gonna pay, desy?!?
Date: 09/10/2010 8:11:10 AM Title: Chapter 34
I totally agree with Logan. 'That bitch!' I am so looking forward to when everybody finds out what Jean is up to...Somebody is gonna find that 'lost' page on that test, I bet. Somebody, like, say, Scott...*evil grin*
You really nailed all my favorite parts of Logan in this one...tough and tender. Can't wait for more! --Wendie
[Report This]Date: 09/10/2010 5:47:30 AM Title: Chapter 34
Jean = evil harpy. xXx
Date: 08/10/2010 12:55:03 PM Title: Chapter 33
Totally hooked on this XD
[Report This]Date: 08/04/2010 9:51:08 PM Title: Chapter 33
Watch. Jean's gunna be so pissed off when she sees that she is going to get an A.
[Report This]Date: 08/04/2010 4:59:15 PM Title: Chapter 33
I can't wait for Logan and the professor to catch on to what Dr. McBitchy-Bitch is doing. Oh, and if I'm really lucky, Scott will be mad enough to dump her, too! Screwing with the test is one thing, but deliberately separating Marie and Becca out of pure meanness is more than she should be allowed to get away with. --Wendie
[Report This]Date: 08/03/2010 5:16:49 AM Title: Chapter 33
Jean seriously needs to start masturbating or something. xXx
Date: 08/02/2010 12:20:43 PM Title: Chapter 33
wow Jean is a complete BITCH!! I love it. I can't wait for Logan to rip her a new one. Hopefully soon! And wouldn't it be wonderful if Rogue aced this test too? That would really stick in her craw! LOL Update soon!
[Report This]Date: 07/31/2010 8:21:53 PM Title: Chapter 32
FINALLY SCOTT ISNT SO MUCH OF A FUCKING DICK.
Poor Logan. *Pouts*
Date: 07/29/2010 10:48:10 AM Title: Chapter 32
I liked this...really shows Scott how involved Logan is, how much he cares, how far he's willing to go, and how much this one part of the charade is hurting him. Loved this line... "I got goofed on and praised at the same time."
[Report This]Date: 07/29/2010 9:59:10 AM Title: Chapter 32
Poor Logan, how hanagg to keep his mouth shut I'll never know even Scott seems to feel sorry for him
Date: 07/29/2010 7:39:27 AM Title: Chapter 32
Logan's 'daddy' dilemma was wonderfully written. And the irony of Jubilee thinking that Logan might have either scared off or killed off (Heaven forbid!) the 'real' daddy when he IS the real daddy is just priceless -- a truly angsty twist or maybe twisted angst. Either way, you pulled it off nicely. Can't wait to see how Rogue's birthday presents work out for all concerned. --Wendie
[Report This]Date: 07/21/2010 7:59:31 PM Title: Chapter 31
MUAHAHAHAHAHA! REVENGE IS SWEET!
Date: 07/20/2010 12:09:57 AM Title: Chapter 30
Lovely chapter...funny, serious, revealing...nicely done!
Date: 07/18/2010 5:14:10 PM Title: Chapter 30
Marie had to bite down her own giggles, when Logan – still chewing and sucking on his cigar – turned his head towards Becca and gazed down on their daughter – sucking peacefully on her silencer. His face froze for a moment before he slowly removed his beloved cigar from his mouth and his dark glare centered on his mate. "ROGUE!"
Oh, My, God!!!! I almost died laughing!!!!!!! That was hysterical. With out a doubt the best mental image in this story for me!!!! Love the Logan silencer and how he realized it was his 'pacifier' great chapter. Still hate Jean though.
[Report This]Date: 07/18/2010 2:14:45 PM Title: Chapter 30
Never thought I'd see a practically fluffy Wolverine:)Very cute chapter!
[Report This]Date: 07/18/2010 12:36:53 PM Title: Chapter 30
"Milkshake day" -- HAHAHAHAHAHA! And the Logan 'silencer' -- just as funny, especially when he realized what she had done. Here in America we call them 'pacifiers', but the result is the same either way.
Another excellent chapter. As much as I know Logan hopes he never has to face the heart-breaking choice of saving either his daughter or his mate (do I detect a bit of foreshadowing there?), I think he's got his priorities straight in thinking he would save Becca first. In fact, as a mother, that's what Rogue would want him to do, too. And if their positions were reversed, I think she would come to the same conclusion. --Wendie
Author's Response: Thanks for your review and rating! I already fixed that pacifier/silencer-thingy. And concerning your musings about Logan having to decide between his two girls - I don't say anything; just let yourself surprise ;-)
Date: 07/18/2010 10:52:46 AM Title: Chapter 30
I really like this chapter, I like how you addressed some of Marie's outbursts (those never did seem right to me), I like the way you handled the rumor topic, the red panties was really cute. Overall a really nice chapter.
[Report This]Date: 07/17/2010 5:53:11 PM Title: Chapter 29
That's sad. Telling her she'll be an alpha female 'one day'. If he told me that I wouldda thrown a bitch fit and told him that I was the Alpha Female. Period.
But then again I am very feisty...
Date: 07/16/2010 11:30:15 AM Title: Chapter 1
The problem with your depiction of Logan not looking like a pedophile is that the premise of your entire story is that he IS attracted to Marie even though she looks young. Otherwise there would be no baby in the first place. So back tracking and now making him not sexually attracted to Maris and having him be more sexually attracted to Jean and a woman of more mature looks seems less like Logan waiting till Marie grows up and more like he doesn't find Marie to be a worthy mate.
[Report This]Date: 07/16/2010 2:33:30 AM Title: Chapter 29
I can't think of any reason for your stories ratings to drop... I love them. You're really creative, and the scenes you write are really vivid. :)
Author's Response: Thanks :-)
Date: 07/15/2010 11:45:03 PM Title: Chapter 29
Hi Desy,
I know I've never reviewed and you shouldn't take that personally: I'm a really bad reader because I hardly ever review, even though I enjoy the stuff I read. I should also mention that I almost never rate things, so don't panic when I don't rate yours either :-)
Since you seem so discouraged in your Author's Note, I thought I would just let you know that I really do like your story's premise. Sometimes I find your pacing a little slow because I think you get bogged down in details and description a little.
Still, I think I would not really notice that if the story flowed better for me. I get hung up on your grammar and spelling errors, mostly because I notice *every single one* because that's what I do for my job: I'm an editor.
So I know you probably hate me right now, but I think I have some good news. Most of your issues would probably be solved by finding yourself a beta reader or two whose first language is English, because they will catch the things you miss. For example, your syntax is often backwards for English, probably because you're German or Dutch or Danish or something.
There are many people on the site who would probably be happy to help you with that, especially if it meant they got updates that much sooner :-)
I like the interactions between the couple and the other X-men, but I sometimes feel like you don't flesh that out enough from the X-men's point of view, only giving Marie and Logan's. The different reactions of the different X-men was interesting, though, especially how Jean started to meddle, where Scott just disapproved and Ororo seemed to hold off on judgment. The professor's refusal to explain what he saw in Marie and Logan's minds to make the situation easier for everyone was very like him, I thought, and Marie and Logan's refusals to elaborate to the others was also very characteristic.
This last conversation between Logan and Marie seemed unfinished, though. Maybe because we're not privy to Logan's inner thoughts during it, the way we seem to be a bit more with Marie? I always thought that Logan was a very internal character, because he says so little in words, but quite a bit through body language and his reactions to others, and you just *know* that there's a whole lot going on behind behind those hazel eyes, especially considering the Wolverine, too.
Okay, I think that's it. I hope this review helps you.
Melanie
Author's Response: Thank you very much especially for this very long review! You're right with your assumption, I'm German. I'm sorry that my mistakes pop into your eyes right away and lessen your fun at reading my story - I'm also quite picky about those little errors in German stories (I stopped reading fanfiction in German years ago) and can understand you completely. It's the same with some English first language writers, who don't seem to know the difference in your/you're, there/their and even our/own?!? (this one was no typo - it went on through the entire story), those little mistakes are for me like blinking in rainbow-colors - I can't oversee them.
So I don't hate you, but I'm glad about your open criticism. I saw on your profile page that you're a beta-reader. Would you help me with my story, please?
Concerning the other X-Men: I'll bring more inner thoughts and also action towards the couple in the next few chapters (I hope you don't like Jean). So thanks again!
Date: 07/15/2010 9:58:06 PM Title: Chapter 29
I think I like this chapter a lot, it is a very interesting perspective on why Logan would still be attracted to Jean but be 'in love' with Marie.
Author's Response: Thanks :-)
[Report This]Date: 07/15/2010 6:03:32 PM Title: Chapter 29
I've really been enjoying your story and look forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks :-)
[Report This]Date: 07/15/2010 5:04:39 PM Title: Chapter 29
You may not have perfect English grammar, but you know Logan and Marie inside and out and that comes through in your stories loud and clear. I loved this chapter! I love how honest they were with each other. And, for the record, I would LOVE to see Rogue assume the 'alpha female' role one day, not just in Logan's life -- because she's already in that role for him -- but because she's a nicer person than Jean. Nobody ever said you had to be a bitch to be 'top dog'.
One grammar point: Logan must have looked quite dumbfolded as he contemplated this accuse.
I think this one might have one typo and one incorrect word usage. The sentence should read:
Logan must have looked quite dumbfounded as he contemplated this accusation.
You do an outstanding job of writing these stories, and based on their content, I haven't seen a 3-star chapter yet! --Wendie
Author's Response: Thank you very much! The one was really a typo and the 'accuse' - I knew something sounded wrong here but Word's spell- and grammar-check said everything is ok and the online Dictionary I use to make sure that I use the right words in the right context came up with 'accuse'. Anyway, thanks and I'll fix right away.