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"Something told her she shouldn’t have her back to him."
She already knew 'who' it was, even if the info hadn't made it to her front brain yet. This is an EXCELLENT start...but GADS we need more!!! Please?
AH! I was getting so into it and it just ended... NO!! How this story isn't a one-shot, I wanna see what happens next! Please write more, and soon :D
-- Wolf
excited to read more, interesting start!
Here here! I second the previous reviews-- an excellent and suspenseful opening. And now.. please-more-soon!
Now that is what I call a 'hook', my friend! And it is lodged solidly in my mouth, which means you will be reeling me in with future chapters, yes? Opening with action is one of the cardinal rules of good fiction and you have executed it perfectly.
I particularly like 'He circled her slowly. She tried to move with him, her head spinning from turning in circles. Something told her she shouldn't have her back to him.' I can just see this, like a scene in a TV show or movie where the camera swings around and around; it makes me dizzy. Outstanding. I look forward to seeing what else you do well. --Wendie
very nice! more soon pls