how soon for ur next addition

I can't believe u are not going to finish this

Author's Response: Not going to and probably are two different things. I hit a snag when writing this one, still haven't figured out how to get over it. I will finish this as soon as I find a suitable way. :)

“Just one. Can I watch?”

Bwuahahahahahahahahahahaha...

Damn good, damn evil chapter! You are such a tease ^_^

Oh yeah, very interesting *waggles eyebrows*

Poor reporter *giggles*

That last paragraph? If I didn't already love Logan, I would now.

"... laughing his ass off."
OMG, so did I, did I ever! That was wonderfully done - no sympathy here for the poor fella, and perfectly in character.Great humour, too.

(And, umm, about to lie... there's two words that look the same
to lie on the bed (past tense: he lay, past perfect: had lain)
to lie => to not speak the truth (past: lied, past perfect: had lied)


Author's Response: Aaargh! I swear I'll strangle my comp! For some reason, maybe because every program in this useless piece of sh...*BLEEP*...t is messed up, but the dictionary keeps changing words no matter what I do or what settings I put on! Grr... Thanks. I guess it's time to take my comp to the shop and let them do an autopsy on it to see what's the problem.

Evil, you are so evil just throw in this chapter and completely ignore the end of the last one... very evil!

Author's Response: Evil? Me? Really? Not my intention. This was supposed to be the last chappie, but logie wanted to have some fun at the ball.

YAY! What a great (hot!) closing to this story - I've enjoyed the whole trip. Thank you!

Heh. That sounds like a line for one screwy sci-fi reality tv show. "Thank you for playing, Bob. You have been offically mindfucked."

Very hot, considerate action. Maybe he could bring some burgers along with sheets and condoms? Sorry, chessy, I know. ^.~

Author's Response: No! No cheesy at all! Or did you mean cheese burgers? I was actually thinking I should return to burgers after this little detour we took. After all, I named the whole freaking fic after them. :)

I bow down to you, oh master. ~bows~ You have managed to go from a scene of utter hotness seamlessly into pure amusement. Rogue's note is bloody priceless! "You have been officially mindfucked."
Much praise! ~bows again~ Much praise!

Author's Response: *bows* Thank you! *bows again* Thank you! I couldn't have done this without... Uh... *slaps Logie's fingers off from the keyboard* How many times do I have to tell you to keep your paws off from MY comp?!

Really like this chapter - wonderful rendering of the machine scene. Glad you still keep the girl-jaded man aspect of their character relationship (or else this "bonding" thing might become a little too fluffy).

Some good, effortless lines in the whole story (e.g. "Everything he didn’t know about traditional CPR could have easily filled up a library.", "His last thought shut the lights before it left the building."). I might be wrong, but you seem to be using them more than you used to, and you do not draw any narrative attention to them - which is the only way to make them effective.

Gratuitous grammar gimmick: to lie at someone's feet => lay => laid
Present tense: He can lie
Past tense: He could lie (The past tense is taken by the "can=>could", so the main verb remains present).
It was YOU who encouraged me! ;-)

Author's Response: Thanks for gimmicks. I can't believe how much I have forgotten from everything I have learned! Well, grammar hasn't been my strongest skill, not even with Finnish. :)

He hated the fact that he could do it so easily, because Scott was a Boy scout with the capital B, following instructions and plans to a T. Had it been the other way around, him watching over Scott, he’d let the brat suffer awhile before getting in to business."
Great insight on Logan's part there - he is actually learning something about himself; he learns it not only through Marie, but it is something sparked by her - great scope for interesting development here.