The Wolverine & Rogue Fanfiction Archive
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[Report This]Date: 04/01/2009 5:12:53 PM Title: Chapter 1
That was a really nice, well written, really fun piece, if a little long ;)
It certainly felt like a fun night out with friends and you did a good job of keeping everyone involved in the story throughout.
Loved the mechanical bull, I've had some good fun on those and remember once a friend of mine getting on one with a very short mini skirt and the guy at the control kept the pace just slow enough so that she wouldn't fall off and they could all enjoy a good look!
The bit you're looking for, where you changed POV, is:
"Marie frowned, trying not to shake. It was a swerve off a well travelled road, being so cool and flirty, but it seemed to effect the man more than she expected. ..... He glanced at me before opening the door that led to the front lobby of the mansion, a brow cocking."
and also in the next paragraph that follows:
"At that he just tipped his head toward the door, waiting for me to walk out. And he did. She was walking toward the garage..."
[Report This]Date: 02/09/2009 5:26:44 PM Title: Chapter 1
It is nothing short of plain crazy that no one has reviewed this story yet.... I'm literally sitting her with a 0.0 face on.
First I want to comment on the story, which is fantastic! There was literally not one little bit of it that I did not enjoy. I loved the opening, where you got a glimpse of Rogue and the junior X-men and I loved reading about the bar scene! What a great part! It literally made me feel like I was sitting at the bar with my friends having a night out- I have no idea how Logan riding a mechanical bull hasn't earned you a fan fiction award!
I love the way you set the two characters up an I love thrilling romp in the woods, and I think every girl whose sexually active out there or who prowls on the dating scene has sat in bed at least once and thought the same thing Rogue was thinking, about doing something sexually public for the man she loved and having it be the stupidest think ever. I really loved that part, but that's just pervey old me lol!
You are a spectacular writing with an uncanny ability to tap into the characters personalities, I felt like I was right there in the bar with them and it was all and all a great read! I can't wait to read more of your stuff!