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Date: 11/15/2009 4:37:30 PM Title: Chapter 5- Atonement
I'd love to see this story continued.
Date: 08/26/2009 2:54:19 PM Title: Chapter 5- Atonement
.... You cannot end a chapter like that!
UPDATE NOW!! :D Im loving it.
Date: 04/21/2009 8:41:02 PM Title: Chapter 5- Atonement
oooooo you must hurry up with the next chapter!
Date: 04/04/2009 2:30:39 PM Title: Chapter 5- Atonement
hahaha i love this.
Date: 04/03/2009 8:47:51 PM Title: Chapter 5- Atonement
A dedication! My first !! Wheeeee :D
I got so excited I jumped up and down in my seat!! Thanks :) *blush*
Then I couldn't help but laugh when I read this line, whether intentional or not... "felt the thick stifling heat of a Mississippi August itching its way up over her skin and biting at her nerves." lol!
I have no idea how many introspective paragraphs you hacked away at ;) but the ones you left hung together well, especially the first 6 as the memories triggered were linked to the moment by their associations to the weather, the breeze, and the wish for a hammock.
Though this line in par.6 "not the horny drunkard who’d fingered her on the couch" make me twitch / feel sorry for Logan because it made him seem such a lech! Like she hadn't wanted it, even though she had!
Par7 followed on well and I was totally intrigued by the last line "Now though she’d gotten her fill of experience and she longed to show the Wolverine what she’d learned."
However, it was short lived as the subsequent paragraph killed the intrigue, so I would have left it out ("The first time with Bobby.." along with the second paragraph after that ("He'd come to her like a crying child..") because it's s just a bit too much on the 'Logan is so great/sexy' front which she then touches on again in the following paragraph just before she looks up to find him there.
The scene of them together was very light, which was nice. Lots of fun bits like..
them talking about the weather, and
"he wondered what she would do if he just jumped her. Just a little." and
"he had just winked at her in broad daylight no less… was Logan a closet winker?"
I can't believe he's inviting her to his room when he's also trying to keep his hands off her! I hope they end up drunk again so he can be totally out of line, and I can't even begin to imagine what he's going to think up to surprise her.. a gift? a candle-lit dinner?
Looking forward to it myself.. ;)
[Report This]Date: 04/03/2009 8:04:32 PM Title: Chapter 5- Atonement
geez just reading that I want the surprise too!!! hehe good chapter and I can't wait for them, alone, in his room, on his bed, with alcohol
lol ^__^
[Report This]Date: 04/03/2009 7:53:06 PM Title: Chapter 5- Atonement
thanks for taking the time to post this chapter. great job as always!
Date: 04/03/2009 9:50:00 AM Title: Chapter 5- Atonement
Chocolate xXx
Date: 04/02/2009 11:06:49 PM Title: Chapter 5- Atonement
"Shit what the hell am I going to surprise her with…..?"
too...many...jokes...head...exploding! actually my first thought was "a logan & wolverine manwich" LMAO!
Author's Response: you! Go straight to your room young lady and finish the next chapter of "the only one who can" immediately!!!! rnrnBy the by that prankster story was hysterical!!!!!!!!!!!! Jean having Rockin Robin stuck in her head, too funny! Not to mention the part where Logan gets blasted into the ground and hello kitty on his jacket! Holy cow it was just amazing...but seriously I'm going to have to hurt you....must....write....new ... chapter!!!!!!!!!! GO!