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Reviewer: Moviemom44 Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 07/10/2012 6:29:05 PM Title: Chapter 47

I'm perfectly fine with your explanation. Nice job. In fact, you did an awesome job with the smut. And Laura's tantrum was heart-wrenching. I really felt Logan and Marie's confusion, fear and pain for their little girl, as well as Laura's misery. I think I need to go back a few chapters and get reacquainted with Laura and why locked doors might cause such a reaction with her...or is this something we don't know yet? Either way -- WELCOME BACK! I have really missed this story!

Just one little note: You might want to change "Swallowing hard, Marie's gaze returned to his bugle." to "his bulge." Switch the 'g' and the 'l' to change 'bugle' ... a small brass horn like a trumpet but without any valves...to 'bulge'...a protrusion, in this case, an aroused male sex organ. While I'm sure Logan would claim that his 'bulge' is capable of making beautiful music, so to speak, I doubt that the bugle would be what he had in mind. Please know that I mean no offense. You do an outstanding job of writing outside your native language, but this particular typo is easy to miss and can't be caught by SpellCheck because 'bugle' is a correctly spelled word...just not the one you meant! I have often wished SpellCheck could read my mind instead of just what my fingers type! I have to admit I did get a chuckle out of it and I'm sure anyone else who caught the error found it amusing as well, but not in a bad way. Once again, welcome back! -- Wendie

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review (I'm also hoping you'll resume your Rogan fanfic 'Unlikely bedfellows').
I didn't take it as offence, on the contrary I'm very grateful that you pointed out this mistake.
Concerning Laura: She was rescued from a lab, in which she was trained to be a weapon - no childhood, no leaving the facility's basement and her handler wasn't very nice either. The little girl has a few traumas of her own.

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