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Date: 04/10/2010 10:11:49 PM Title: Chapter 4
I could just kill the slut bitch...I mean Jean. What the hell is she thinking?! Obviously she isn't. You;re good. You have me worked up over this story!
Author's Response: YES!! >pumps air with fist< that's what I'm talkin 'bout. So glad I could have that effect on a reader. Thank you!
[Report This]Date: 04/10/2010 7:59:57 PM Title: Chapter 1
I have to say. I never review anymore. I read the stories on my mobile so I never sign in so me writing this is just proof of how awesome this story is. I have been following this story and the end of that last chapter (4) just made cry a bit...and smile and whisper, "it's such a good story. It's such a good story"
This is such a good story. Keep doin what your doing and I'll keep reading and saying "It's such a good story" ... cause it is.
Author's Response: Oh. My. God. I keep reading you words over and over again. I'm so grateful, so proud I could have that effect on you. Omg. Thank you so so so so much. I'll have the next chapter up in a week, and I hope I can make you say that again.
Date: 04/10/2010 6:56:44 PM Title: Chapter 4
Ok I really hate, absolutely HATE Jean! But my question is, Why in hell did Logan let that happen to Marie? He should have stopped Jean!
Author's Response: Yeah, I hate Jean too.It's just so fun. :)..... Marie's injuries did require her to see a doctor. I stretched reality in the previous chapter, let her heal a bit or else she would have died without medical attention--a saline drip, for example. Logan could not stop Jean because he knew he'd have to come back later with Marie to finish the tests, and he wouldn't have been able to put her through that again. Thank you for reviewing, I hope I clarified things!
Date: 04/10/2010 6:13:03 PM Title: Chapter 4
OMFG! Once again, I bow to your amazing ability to set the scene, for example, when they first approach the institute and how you described their surroundings in only one or two amazingly descriptive sentences.
Jean is perfectly portrayed and Logan’s protectiveness over little Rogue is so compelling and adorable. This is certainly a dark story, but there are ribbons of well-placed ‘Logan sweetness’ running through it, which I absolutely love.
When I first started reading this story I honestly thought it couldn’t get any better. But I was wrong.
Most amazing line: “But she grew silent, motionless. Logan watched pieces of her die, one after another. Like tiny murders.”
Author's Response: There are very, very few words that can express my response online that I haven't used already to other reviews. I hope you believe how sincere I am when I say thank you, I'm happy you liked it, and I hope you continue to enjoy the rest. Your review put a huge smile on my face and made me bounce on my chair.
Date: 04/10/2010 5:53:51 PM Title: Chapter 4
God how can Xavier and Jean be so dense? And heartless? They can read minds!!! Grrrr. This is still one of best stories around, Keep it up.
Author's Response: Thank you!!! Thank you!!! Thank you!
[Report This]Date: 04/10/2010 5:42:16 PM Title: Chapter 4
This story moves me more than I have been moved in a very very long time. You have such talent, thank you for sharing and please please continue.
Author's Response: I'm so happy that my writing could make anyone feel that way. Thank you. >hugs< Next chapter will be posted about the same time next Saturday. Only three or so chapters to go.
Date: 04/10/2010 5:34:22 PM Title: Chapter 4
I bow to your awesome talent--describing a gang rape with one line and making it feel more menacing and horrific than any ten pages of description by a lesser writer--Holy Mother, that was amazing! Actually, everything about the whole mansion/med lab experience was perfectly played--her progression from wide-eyed wonder to catatonic oblivion--excellent. Logan's guilt was positively heart-wrenching.
And I'm sorry it was what it was, but thank Christ something finally shut Jean up. (Between your story and mine, she's getting way too much action with Logan to suit me. Damn her!)
I am so anxious to see what Xavier's problem is--and how Logan deals with it.
Nice job on the italics. Looks good. --Wendie
Author's Response: Thank you! Thank you! You wouldn't believe how crazy happy I am right now. After years of reading everything on this site, all the brilliant authors and stories, I am always shocked at even the idea of someone liking my writing. I don't think I'll ever get used to it. :) In a good way.
Date: 04/10/2010 3:04:43 PM Title: Chapter 4
*growls*
I'm angry because of what happened to Marie and that's why I had to growl - wait till you make me sad and I'll be crying all over my keyboard.
I'm known for growling and blubbering with mass tissue use around here ;)
Author's Response: Oh! Lol. Make sure u put a protective sheet over your computer. ;) Gracias.
Date: 04/10/2010 1:59:23 PM Title: Chapter 4
This is so heartbreaking! Poor, poor Marie. What's up w/ the prof? I'm not entirely sure what kind of mind juju he did on Marie, but I don't like it.
Your description of Jean and the way she carries herself was perfect, but then again I also think that Jean needs to be pushed off of the Blackbird so I'm a little biased. Just sayin'...
Author's Response: Lol, thank you. I think we all wanna see her pushed out of a plane. >sigh< Someday....
Date: 04/08/2010 6:27:42 PM Title: Chapter 3
I have a bad feeling about Xavier...
Date: 04/08/2010 6:10:28 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is my kind of story!
Date: 04/08/2010 12:23:50 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is a really wonderful story. Interesting and unique with beautiful writing and imagery, even though it's still dark. I really like it I hope you update it soon! I'm dying to find out what happens next.
Author's Response: Can you feel it? I'm hugging you. Thank you so, so much. I'm glad you like it and hope you continue to. Next update soon!
[Report This]Date: 04/08/2010 10:01:20 AM Title: Chapter 3
Awesome, awesome, awesome, awesome! I can't really say anything else other than I absolutely adore this concept. You truly deserve all the praise you're getting, and I'm super eager to read the rest of this story. Amazing, really. Thank you! :)
Author's Response: >hugs very, very tightly< Thank you. Its strange, I spent a year trying NOT to write this story. Its been in my head a long time, and I hope the rest is worthy of your compliments. The next chapter should be on here....Saturday. I'm halfway done now.
Date: 04/07/2010 5:52:06 PM Title: Chapter 3
I am really enjoying this story. I thought this chapter was great. I was so glad to see Marie improve some. I am really not happy with the professor. It seems like he has something personal at stake with keeping Marie hidden. Update soon please!
Author's Response: I'm so glad you like it. :) And I love that I can make people dislike the Proffessor as much as I do. Next update soon!
Date: 04/06/2010 4:14:36 PM Title: Chapter 3
LOVE THIS!!!! Gah. HATE that I have to wait for more. Boo. :(
I have an idea! Quit your job/school/whatever, ignore your family/pets/friends/home, and dedicate yourself to amusing me with the rest of this...
Author's Response: LMAO!!! What a great idea. Why didn't I think of that before. Lemme make some phone calls real quick and I'll get right on it. Lol...you should see chapter four Friday/Saturday-ish.
Date: 04/06/2010 2:08:54 PM Title: Chapter 2
I'm kind of glad I discovered this with more than one chapter written - but I'm already sad that I'm catching up...
Date: 04/06/2010 2:01:05 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is so sad - but beautiful. Why isn't her skin working? Hmmm...can't wait to find out!
Author's Response: Thank you!!! No spoilers for you, though.... ;~)
[Report This]Date: 04/06/2010 10:19:19 AM Title: Chapter 3
Just wanted to tell you how much I LOVED your story! Anything that has Logan taking care of Rogue is a Good Thing!Please update soon!
Author's Response: Lol. I agree, and you can tell me that anytime at all. :)
Date: 04/06/2010 1:26:02 AM Title: Chapter 3
Somebody really does need to see about moving that 'delete' button further away from the 'respond' button. I just hate when that happens.
Anyway, originally I said I thought what might be 'off' was Rogue's response--or lack of one--to Logan beating the shit out of the druggie in the parking lot. Seemed to me that after all his loving, tender care of her for so long, such a violent outburst on his part--coldly delivered or not--might have her shying away from him, at least a little, rather than seeking comfort from him right away. Then again, I said, perhaps there is more going on behind those cloudy eyes than I realize; perhaps she understands more than she can express through words or actions and she knows he was only protecting her.
Overall, the chapter is still wonderfully balanced in terms of his baser instincts (the bar scene--oh, baby, baby!) vs. his nobler motivations (food's ready--gotta go). I love that he doesn't entirely trust Chuck. More on that later, perhaps? And the creative swearing was probably even more effective in the abstract than it would have been in actual purple prose, as it allowed me to use my imagination -- 'blistering' would not have been to strong a word to describe the cursing I envisioned.
All in all, as others have pointed out, you are being too hard on yourself. Relax. And keep writing! --Wendie
Author's Response: Oh, wow. Thank you so much for retyping all that; it was really generous!.... As I've said(three times, haha), thank you and I'm happy you enjoyed it. And I agree with you on what Marie's response would have been to Logan's attack....if she'd seen it. I wrote that she was curled up, head on the armrest. But I'll go back when I upload the next chapter, and tweak it for clarity. :) :) Thanks again.
Date: 04/06/2010 12:45:43 AM Title: Chapter 3
I feel like this was a transition chapter. A necessary one at that. Don't be so hard on yourself either! While we're all practically foaming at the mouth for updates don't forget that you should enjoy writing too. No more nightmares - only inappropriate Logan dreams from now on ;)
Author's Response: Lol. Thank you very much. I think everyone gets iffy on transition chapters. And I do love writing, even when I'm struggling through it. Its just so dang fun! :)
Date: 04/05/2010 11:52:04 PM Title: Chapter 3
Moaaaarrrrrrr :D *Dinosaur Kristen stomps around* MOaaaaaarrrr! :D
Love it, keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Lmao >ducks back into cave, starts scribbleing on the walls
[Report This]Date: 04/05/2010 10:39:17 PM Title: Chapter 3
i LOVE it!!!! i cant wait for next chapter. NOTHING wrong with it
Author's Response: >high fives< Thank you. Next chappie soon!
Date: 04/05/2010 10:07:57 PM Title: Chapter 3
As usual, I think your fic is looking good from here. The one thing that was a little off for me was that you didn't dialogue Marie saying anything, you narrated it which I think clouds it's impact and significance. Plus, I expected Logan to have more of a reaction to her finally speaking. Perhaps, that's what felt off for you?
Author's Response: Maybe.....Hmm.....Yeah, that might be it....I just couldn't *see* those little scenes of her speaking. But I may go back and tweak his reaction to be more clear. Thanks!
Date: 04/05/2010 10:07:24 PM Title: Chapter 3
I love the way you quickened things in Marie's...well 'healing', and I can't wait to read what you've prepared for them at the mansion...
Hoping Xavier will stop being a dick head soon enough!
Author's Response: Muchas gracias. No spoilers, but I have trouble seeing The Prof as anything but a dick.
Date: 04/05/2010 9:55:46 PM Title: Chapter 3
I liked it, I would chaulk it up to being a transitional chapter and not worry about the 'bleh' feeling. You have to have the passage of time while she gets well. You have done that here, in little steps - I am guessing more then just a few weeks have passed since he picked her up. That you choose to do it this way instead of just having her be better after two months had passed has allowed you to be deliberate about the development of their relationship. I like it and I don't trust good old Chuck in this one. Not at all.
Author's Response: Thank you. Originally, I had each section labeled in time(two weeks later, four days later), but I took it out. It just felt more effective.