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Date: 01/31/2011 11:04:29 AM Title: Chapter 17
A little possessive Mr. Logan ;)
Date: 01/04/2011 1:20:39 AM Title: Chapter 17
This:
He was closer to anger than worry by the time Jean offered her martyred expression and a lotioned hand, palm-up, to the girl.
For some reason that one adjective "a lotioned hand," makes me want to smack Jean. Love it.
Author's Response: I know, right? Lotion always pisses me off...
Date: 12/16/2010 3:14:15 PM Title: Chapter 17
Having found myself with 5 mins peace and quiet (which in this household is about as common as seeing Santa) I realized that although I have read this chapter I have not reviewed. (I am presuming I had a good reason – you probably made me late for work again as most of the update days for this story make me!!) anyway….. I shall now rectify my mistake and beg forgiveness for lateness.
I’m going to have to pick out a few things that stood out for me, probably different from everybody elses (as usual) but to me it’s the attention to detail and more to the point the way you write them that make this so much more than a just a fantastic story.
‘a few occasional drops of excess paint on the canvas's otherwise repetitive pattern. A predictability that she wanted badly to trust.’ Can’t tell you how much I love this – right at the start and hits you like a ton of bricks – superb.
Her breath didn’t falter or hitch or any of the things 99.9% of writers would have written ‘Her breath tripped over itself.’
‘How shocking, that the latter was stronger. Much.’ – that it’s shocking to be almost comfortable has a sadness to it yet it’s full of hope too – again love that line.
‘It would not have mattered half as much to him if it did not matter to her.’ I think we can sum up the whole story with that line x
Protectiveness, possessiveness and jealousy at the beach - some great one liners in there btw. (the aloe vera, daring to keep smiling in the face of the wolverine, breathless pussy, as if hairless was a thing to be proud of.)
Loved the Last two chapters - yet again from beginning to end a wonderful chapter.
I really must make these shorter ;)
Author's Response: This is the first thing I saw after coming in from work, probably the best welcome-home. I'm almost glad that it came "late", such a great surprise. Thank you for taking time from the chaos and for general awesome-possumness.
[Report This]Date: 12/08/2010 12:56:03 PM Title: Chapter 17
i've been keeping up with your story for some time now, and now i had to register to finally tell you, how cruelly sweet you are going about logan and his girl! i especially like the way you are slowly zooming in on their relationship! first fic i've read with a bitchy jubilee, and your logan is absolutely awesome!
Author's Response: Yay! Thank you, thankyouthankyouthankyou! I'm so honored to hear that. Welcome to the WRFA!!
Date: 12/07/2010 4:11:50 AM Title: Chapter 17
so now, i have reached the end point, so far.
I have to say, i love this story... especially your version of Logan here. Almost reluctant than dependent. can't wait for more
Author's Response: Thank you, a billion katrillion jillion times. So glad you feel that way.
[Report This]Date: 12/05/2010 11:56:30 PM Title: Chapter 17
Wow! I couldn't imagine doing all that work to get to a computer to write like you did - that's dedication. Thank you!
I don't want this to come to an end, please don't let it end! pleasepleaseplease.
Also, I'm a little slow, but I can't quite catch what the book part with Erik was about. =(
Though, as others have also mentioned, "It was hard to tell which of the two girls better handled their loneliness." That line? Killer. It really made Jubilee sound less like a jerk, and more like someone that needs a hug too.
Awesome writing, as always. *heart*
(you may have received two notifications for this, I deleted & re-posted to fix a typo)
Author's Response: I'd worried that some people would be confused. Sorry! It's my fault making it clear enough. He dropped the book to startle Marie, try to activate her mutation. Thank you!!!! >hugs<
Date: 12/05/2010 4:34:01 PM Title: Chapter 17
Oooo.... I like this. Bobby is the erfect distraction/annoyance for this Wolverine. Stupid Erik, makes me want to beat him in the head with that book. I love it. Defiantely more whenever you can.
Author's Response: Thank you very, very much.
Date: 12/04/2010 11:55:58 AM Title: Chapter 17
Am more than happy to provide you with *days* of procrastination. It's the very least I can do.
"Like a glass wall had fallen between himself and almost everybody else...." This and the following lines I really liked. I had this image in my head when I was reading the scene and it's like your words *knew* that during the set up & then laid it out perfectly in worded form.
"Heat sitting smugly on his shoulders." Smug is so right here. You find the most perfect words for even the tiniest of sentences that still pack a punch of description.
"Breathless after only fifty yards or so. Pussy." and "He didn't like how the boy stuck out his chest, as if hairless was a thing to be proud of." Lol-ed for real at these two lines. Thoroughly appreciated the subtle shout out to The One True Chest. *Bows head, gives thanks for it*
I realized early on while reading this chapter that the way you write is like overdosing on something really really good (like chocolate lava cake..droooooools). Your descriptions, words choices, usage, & construction are just *too* good. And it's seamless, not overworked; it doesn't read like you're trying to hard to make the words do what you want them to do (even though I know you have a permanent dent in your head from the desk bangage while writing). So I hope that makes sense.
I also had to point this out: "Drover her in his pickup so she wouldn't have to sit with the others in the van." I know you meant drove, but Freudian slip maybe? ;p Someone been watching Australia, hmm? This just proves that you're brain is All Jackman, All The Time. *No Rest For The Obsessed!!!!!* I *love* it and I'm proud to serve in the SCC along side you. *wipes tear*
Author's Response: This review made me genuinely "WOOT", and I'm not much of a wooter. Thank you for bringing out the woot in me, Sahara. Am always grateful and happy to hear your thoughts on a chapter. >hugs<.....And was totally thinking of you and the SCC when the hairless line was being scribbled. ;~D
Date: 12/04/2010 11:24:45 AM Title: Chapter 17
Congrats on the new hardware! And you have certainly used it to great advantage with this chapter. I detected a much lighter tone in this than in most of what has come before, but your descriptive powers and your character insight are still, as always, razor sharp. One line in particular reached out and clocked me right across the chin:
It was hard to tell which of the two girls better handled their loneliness.
Love that interpretation of Jubilee's attitude. I wonder which one of them will be the first to try to bridge that sadly unnecessary gap.
Jean's jealousy is obvious and I'm glad it's cost her, but I'm sorry it had to affect Marie as well. And that scamp Erik...Naughty, naughty.
I am fascinated to see how the whole 'Bobby' issue plays out. Lord, there are so many layers to that 'triangle' that it could make a whole other story. Her need to connect in a 'healthy' way with a boy her own age...Logan's conflicted emotions -- does he let her explore those feelings with no interference from him, even though it will kill him to hold back? Or does he hover and intimidate out of a forbidden jealousy he can't acknowledge even to himself? And how will he stand the wait for all the years between now and when she's legal?
Oh, the anticipation... --Wendie
Author's Response: Your chin? Ouch. No ice in my fridge, but here's a bag of peas. Fanfiction can be so brutal sometimes, can't it? Thank you for the stupendous review (very rare adjective for me, saved for only special occasions--am more of a awesome/great/pimpalicious kinda girl). >hugs<
Date: 12/04/2010 12:51:21 AM Title: Chapter 17
Aw Logan is so cute! Really I love him being so cranky around everyone and so careful and nice with the girl at the same time. And the fact he doesn't even know why he acts that way (or he doesn't want to think much about it) is just great! your Logan is my favorite ever. And I just noticed lately the last parts of your chapters are my favorite too, coincidence? I don't know, it is too late in the night to make any sense lol.
Great job as always and congrats on the new laptop!
Author's Response: The last parts of the chapters are normally my favorite parts as well, as long as the inspiration holds. It's where I'm starting to dig my teeth in--so of course that's where it has to end. I loved this, and I'm so glad you feel that way. Thank you very uber muchas super much.
Date: 12/04/2010 12:40:49 AM Title: Chapter 17
Thank you for writing.
~Mia
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing. <3
Date: 12/03/2010 10:51:57 PM Title: Chapter 17
another wonderful, beautiful chapter! i love how protective, possessive and wonderful logan is with her. she better not get with bobby! but jean, grrr, such a martyrdom complex. please update again soon!
Author's Response: >bounces, hugs< Thank you. This was the first review I read this morning, and it put a great big smile on my face. >hugs again<