"his dry lips smiling bemusedly but not sharing their harmlessness with his eyes."

OK, I gotta ask. How many versions of that did you write before you hit on this gorgeous bit of prose? Because, I swear by all that's holy, if you got that on the first try, I really am never gonna speak to you again. I will continue to read every single word you write, because I'm not an idiot and would never deny myself such a staple of life as your stories...Oh, hell, who am I kidding? I would not only speak to you, I would beg you on bended knee to teach me how to do what you do...to think like you think. And, it turns out, the above quote is just one of many examples of your amazingness in this chapter.

The disjointed conversation between Jubes, Kitty and ? made almost no sense at first, just the way it would have sounded to Rogue as she was half-listening and not really included in the conversation anyway...Amazingness, again.

And then Jubes little dig about Logan having nothing holding him at the mansion...oh, she's rotten in this one, ain't she? I'll be interested to see if you tell us why she's so hostile...or if I'll care if she doesn't quit making me wish someone would bitch slap her...

And the painstaking detail in the description of Logan's agony and Marie's mysterious (to her) lack of discomfort as they share his bed...I had goosebumps AND a lump in my throat.

The bubble that burst in her chest...that was that exhale, that expulsion of the last of her nervousness, wasn't it? More amazingness as you find and illustrate the parallel so beautifully.

And finally, you didn't spare the poor bastard the morning wood, did you? Talk about a man in need of rest, but can't find any...Sorry, Logan, your misery made me smile. Blame Rose...Miss Amazingness wrote it funny.

But I wasn't chuckling on those last two lines. Nope, you can't laugh when your mouth is hanging open in awe...I just proved it.

SO sorry it took so long for me to read and review this chapter. I just haven't had uninterrupted time to concentrate on it until now. I wish you a much smoother 'labor and delivery' for the next chapter, but I have to say that, just like the real deal--the results not only make up for the pain, they make you forget it so thoroughly that you're willing to do it again! --Wendie

Author's Response: Do you have any idea how tremendous (Cool! I never get to use that word!) this review of yours is, how jaw-dropping, eyes-welling *perfect* timing you had? A happy little spinal block just when I'd begun to rethink the titles I'd picked out of The Big Book Of Baby Names and started calling that fleshy ball of contracting hate and in my tummy names they'd bleep out on T.V. Chipping away at a scene that Does. Not. Want. to be written--stubborn piece of---anyway, thank you. I'm grinning like a mildly retarded hyena.....Actually can't recall how many tries that line took, does that spare me your wrath? I remember not being too happy with that section in general, so I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you, in every language it can be spoken in, including pig Latin.

Hola!!
I'm looking forward to reading this story in one piece. It's sad that after each chapter you have to stop so you don't get the chance to get the atmosphere and all.
I read very much until the last two parts in one piece and really, it was awesome, although the way they met and all is completely different than in the movies, which basically is all I know about the X-Men universe, altough recently I started watching X-Men Evolution on YOutube xD
Well. I'm going to read the whole story in one turn once you've posted all of it. And then I'm so going to get lost in your story that I won't be able to talk to anybody more than three or four sentences when I've finished, what always happens when I read a good story.

So, to sum it up and to stop babbling around, I like your story even though it's different from the movie and I hope you will post the remaining parts very soon so that I will get the luck and the joy to read it in one go.
I hope what I said made sense :D

Have a nice evening,
Shuni

Author's Response: There are many different types of stories (if you click on the 'Help' button, there's a really great list of them). This is an AU--Alternate Universe, which means it is different in many ways from the movie, if that makes things any less confusing. :~) I'm glad you've enjoyed it so far, and I hope you continue to for the remaining chapters. Thank you!!!!!

Ive got a hard case of warm fuzzy feelings after reading this. I LOVED the whole bed scene first from Logans pov and then Maries, just perfect.
I also loved Jubes and Kitty conversation it gave us a quick shot of how Marie's life is feeling an outsider with the other girls in her own room. I also liked the way you showed Logans vulnerability and his struggle with his needs it felt so real. I swear I could feel myself tense reading that.
Then theres Lensherr that I dont know what he has to do with all this but I guess you will let us all know in the next chapter.
This was one of my fave chapters bc I was so looking forward this kind of moments when Logan and Marie get connected in a deeper way. Thank you for writting this, I can't wait for the next chapter!!!

Author's Response: Thank you, I was thinking of you when I wrote it (in a hoping-you'll-like it kind of way, not the awkward way it came out in). I love your fuzzies!!! Thankyouthankyouthankyou. You have been elected chief of the Awesome tribe, long may you reign.

Outstandingly written chapter. Your descriptions of the shifting between the two protagonists well timed and natural. It is a pleasure, always, to read a chapter written by you...You can be a proud fic-mom!

Author's Response: >smiles proudly between diaper changes and spit-ups.< Thank you! I'm so, so, soooo happy to hear you say so. It's a pleasure anytime to receive feedback from you.

A new chapter, and I'll have to read it probably a few more times to really decide what's best, because my God, I *felt* poor Logan burning. But off the cuff, it'll be hard to top:
"Wolverine," he said, drawing out the word with a false camaraderie. "Always a pleasure to see such a finely constructed piece of metal as yourself."
and this:
Foot of platonic space between them like a sitcom from the 1950's.

Author's Response: Really? I wasn't so fond of that scene. Glad to hear you enjoyed it. (Much YAY-ing and bouncing SQUEEs). Thank you.

I am beyond words. This was so heart felt and your ability to describe feelings and build scenes is just outstanding. If I can ever be half as good as you were in this chapter, I would be forever grateful.

Favorite line: But like always, like a reply to an unasked question or unspoken call, she didn't have to. Didn't have to know, didn't have to ask, didn't have to worry, didn't have to do anything but be there for him to be as well.

Though there are so many more that were amazing as well.

Author's Response: Your words made my day, made me absolutely ecstatic. There's no way I can thank you enough.

Daaaayum, Rose! Your Jubie is a bitch!!!!!

"And I swear to god, if he calls me 'yellow' one more time I'm going to, like, file a complaint. Cuz that's, like, totally racist, you know?" YES! So glad you finally worked this in! I had forgotten it for a bit, then you toss it in when I'm not looking. Nice.

She's still a mega bitch. Wow. I was absolutely disgusted by her, what she said & what she did - which is a testament to how well you described all of that. Ugh. She left a bad taste in my mouth.

But that part you describe before Jubes & Pyro return from their "date" is so thorough, so detailed without bogging us down with words.

You are the Queen of Subtext (I'm really not just handing titles out these days, y'know). There is so, so, so much going on under the surface for them. In fact, just about all of it is internal conflict that you map out beautifully and delicately. You described how Logan could feel every inch of Marie, then later on you casually popped in -from Marie's POV - his choice of a thick sweater to show just what he did about that problem. Ugh, I love how you constructed that.

Poor Logan & his morning wood. Y'know, it's not nice to tease your Logies like that (side bar: no red squiggle line of condemnation for the word "Logie". wtf?).

That said, I appreciate the screaming, goopy, mishapen dedication. I appreciate it all the more since it's not real because newborns annoy me/ creep me out.

Author's Response: Haha. Didn't want to spoil the surprise in the Authors Notes--really glad you liked how the Yellow was used, know it was a little...*smaller* than you might have envisioned it would be. (Perhaps your JuJu will counteract mine?)....As usual, your review made me bounce and I am thankful for each and every word.