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Reviewer: Wolverette Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/26/2011 2:34:36 PM Title: The Uncertainty

Oh my, what a beautifully written chapter! I simply loved the words you used here, each and every sentence perfectly crafted to tug at the heartstrings. I would almost swear I could hear the sounds of the night in that final section along with Rogue - and when Wolverine appeared at the doorway behind her I held my breath, hardly daring to read on for fear she would reject him and yet needing to know the outcome. Not many stories affect me so deeply and I am impressed!
Yes, a truly beautifully written chapter and now I find myself counting the hours until the next one........ Please update soon!!

Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked the chapter, and that you found it moving. Your review moved me! :-D I'll try to update as soon as I can...hopefully by the end of this week at the latest. Next chapter has smut, which always takes me longer to write, but hopefully it'll be worth the wait. ;-)

Reviewer: litlen Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/26/2011 8:02:54 AM Title: The Uncertainty

Whoops – I’m slacking, I missed an update! Oh well 2 chappies to read so all the better for me :)
Loved the Prof having to admit his errors having seen the results, very nice dialogue between him and Logan, also loved the garden scene with Storm and again in the following chapter I like the use of Storm and her calmness to tell it how it is and along with Logan trying to force the issue the fact that Rogue did end up taking a look didn’t seem false or rushed. The scene on the wall was brilliantly done – the little steps taken; her edging over to offering her hand, (loved that he only had to say her name for the walls to tumble so to speak!) you pointed out that you thought this was a slow-ish chapter but if you hadn’t taken your time here I think you would have lost ‘the journey of emotion’ that she had to go through to get to the beginning of the end (if you know what I mean!)

Think the best line was the last one – ‘She went inside, and this time he did not follow’ so much meaning wrapped up in there.

Author's Response: Everyone deserves a twofer once in awhile. ;-) I'm so glad you're liking Xavier and Ororo. I felt like it was enough to have Logan in Marie's head nagging her, it was time to let some of the other mansion residents help her figure things out for awhile, while Logan lurks and stalks and tries awkwardly to help from a distance. ;-) I'm also glad that Marie's changing feelings about Logan are coming across as believable and not boring! "Journey of emotion," sounds so much deeper than my writing deserves!

Reviewer: Wanderlust Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/26/2011 6:50:38 AM Title: The Uncertainty

Another great installment. And I'm with Alesia; I like that they've reached a detente. It feels more believable than all of a sudden to have smiley sunshines and happy birds, you know? My favorite part of this chapter:

He sighed, looking almost dejected. “I’m not your enemy, Marie.”

Her anger was gone too, leaving her feeling cold and empty inside. “Maybe not. But you’re not my friend either. Not like you pretended to be.” She turned toward the elevator, and this time he made no move to stop her. She stopped, but didn’t turn to look at him. “And the name is Rogue.”

Well done!

Author's Response: So glad you liked it! Yes, I'm trying to hit the happy middle between dragging it on too long and having them reconcile too suddenly to be believable. Hopefully this in-between step will help. I'm glad you liked that bit of the chapter. I've found that Marie in this fic is a little weepier than I usually like to write her, so I enjoy the parts when she's a little more badass.

Reviewer: alesia Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/26/2011 12:48:20 AM Title: The Uncertainty

The emotion in this chapter just jumps off the page and twists your heart. It is wonderful. I am very glad we have achieved detante if not quite reconciliation.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you felt that way! Yes, I felt it would be rushing it to have total reconciliation right away, but if it helps they "reconcile" like bunnies in the next chapter. ;-) Detente is a good word for where they are now, but Marie did touch him with her bare hand, and that means a hell of a lot to her. Notice in the previous chapters, even when she had control of her skin, she still had her gloves on. So far she's only touched him to hurt him, so this is a big step forward for her. :-D

Reviewer: Shuttlelauncher Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/25/2011 5:11:34 PM Title: The Uncertainty

Perfect!

Author's Response: Thanks! ;-D

Reviewer: tamisnead Signed star star star star half star [Report This]
Date: 04/25/2011 4:09:54 PM Title: The Uncertainty

OMG With every chapter I feel likeI've been on an emotional roller-coaster! More please!

Author's Response: Aw, that's a great compliment! Poor Marie really is being tugged in all directions in these last few chapters, but hopefully she's on the right track now. :-D

Reviewer: g-love99 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/25/2011 3:59:53 PM Title: The Uncertainty

such great tension here, and a nice setup at he end...thans!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm so glad you liked it.

Reviewer: Anami Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/25/2011 3:50:13 PM Title: The Uncertainty

This is heartbreaking. They so deserve to be happy.

Author's Response: Aw. At least I promised a happy ending, right? I really wanted to make sure Marie didn't "come around" too easily...she really was grievously betrayed by what Logan did, even if he had good reason to do it. But, on the other hand, the story would go nowhere if she held a grudge forever. Something will happen next chapter that speeds the reconciliation along considerably. ;-)

Reviewer: serafim Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/25/2011 3:23:32 PM Title: The Contact

This is truly such a beautiful story - I love how you are always able to convey how the both of them are feeling, making my sympathetic to both.

Author's Response: Aw, thanks. I'm glad they are both coming across as sympathetic! It's been really hard to try to walk that line so that it's the situation that's at fault, and not really either of their actions.

Reviewer: baybelletrist Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/25/2011 2:48:44 PM Title: The Uncertainty

I love watching Marie make this emotional journey. Your writing is as technically excellent as always; there's some truly elegant language here, but it never detracts from the forward momentum of the story. Two thumbs up. :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! I always feel that my writing is so utilitarian compared to others on this site who write so lyrically and poetically (looking at you, Rose and Sahara and skybound!), it's nice to know I hit a lucky phrase now and then. ;-)

Reviewer: Ebony10 Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/24/2011 5:37:33 PM Title: The Garden

This is such a fantastic story. I love the depth you give the characters. Thanks for the update(s)!!!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review, and for the compliment! It's nice to hear that these chapters that seem a little slow to me are serving the purpose of giving depth to the characters. I always get nervous about chapters with less action.

Reviewer: DarkWing Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/24/2011 4:04:14 PM Title: The Garden

First of all, I have to confess that I registered on this site solely to be able to leave you a review! :)))

Wow, what an amazing story. Even though I am just getting into Wolverine/Rogue fan fiction, it is glaringly obvious that your tale is an absolute gem. The character interaction is superb, very real to every point possible... and could I mention hot as hell when in comes to Logan?! And Wolvering of course... especially the growling parts *wink wink nudge nudge* ;)

I am looking forward to following this story until its end and cannot wait to read some more *wide, happy grin*

Well done! XD

Author's Response: Aw, I'm so honored that you registered just to review my story! I'm so glad you liked it, and that you're discovering Wolverine/Rogue fic. There is so much amazing stuff on this site. I got hooked in ... what, six months ago?...and it's become quite an addiction. :-D So happy you're liking Logan (and growly Wolverine, of course, always the best part). Your timing was perfectly, I'm just now struggling to write some good smut, and could use the encouragement! I love reading smut and my stories always have it, but it's so hard to write without lapsing into tired old cliches. So, anyway, you've got that to look forward to in the chapter after the next one. ;-) At least the next chapter is long, and has lots of Rogan interaction. Thanks again for your review, you've definitely made my day!

Reviewer: alesia Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/21/2011 11:12:56 PM Title: The Garden

I adore the way you had Xavier not be completely clueless. He is so often - when written in WR fics at all either perfect, a fool or a villain. To find a writer willing to let Xavier have flaws, realize them and learn from them is extremely refreshing. I hadn't ever heard that story of 'Ro's parents but it fits perfectly into her story and fears. I really like the conversation with Logan and Xavier - it was insightful and the conversation between Rogue and 'Ro was incredibility sweet. :)

Author's Response: Thanks. I was not happy with how he was coming across in the beginning of the fic, because he was seeming a little villain-y, but it was really just my attempt to make Logan's perfidy a little more understandable. In my mind Xavier was just misjudging the situation because of his single-minded focus on the Brotherhood and because he lacked telepathy in this instance. I was glad to give him a chance to explain some of that, I really like Xavier and can't imagine Marie being happy at a mansion run by Jerk Xavier. Yeah, it's actually 'Ro's official (as of wikipedia) backstory that she was orphaned during an Suez-Crisis aircraft attack, and that her parents were killed and she was buried under the rubble and subsequently claustrophobic. I kinda added the part about them shielding her with their own bodies, but I'm a parent and I know if they could they would have.

Reviewer: Melancholy Rogue Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/21/2011 10:32:02 PM Title: The Garden

Oh! This is a lovely chapter. I really liked the interaction between Ororo and Rogue. And the "Harder to be the one who lives..." is a beautiful line and very, very true. :/

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! Yeah, I really like 'Ro. I hadn't known much about her backstory, until I read a fic that mentioned her being a thief in Egypt. I was actually going to have her talk about that (under a general, "We've all done things we're not proud of" kinda thing but then I read up on her backstory and realized the story of her parents' death was actually very analogous to what happened with Marie and Bobby. And sorry that the "Harder to be the one who lives..." line rang true for you. :-/ Hugs.

Reviewer: serafim Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/21/2011 8:56:03 PM Title: The Garden

I really enjoyed this chapter, the sense of Logan's torment, Professor's guilt and Ororo's empathy really rang true to me. You did such a wonderful job with the interaction between Rogue and Ororo, and that bit about Bobby coming out more because of the familiarity of the mansion was just perfect. This wasn't a slow chapter at all, it really fleshed out who Rogue is and what she means to Logan. Bravo. :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm so glad you liked it. The thing about Bobby slipping out may be important later. ;-)

Reviewer: Wanderlust Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/21/2011 8:54:52 PM Title: The Garden

Yeah, self-reflective Xavier! Yeah, thoughtful Logan! Yeah, serene Ororo! You have me cheering for them all. And anxiously awaiting the next chapter :)

Author's Response: :-D I'm so glad you liked it. Yes, I'm hoping Marie will discover that things aren't as black-and-white as they seemed at first. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Shuttlelauncher Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/21/2011 8:53:28 PM Title: The Garden

Yay, your back! Very touching chapter...I always liked Ro...she seems so wise. Poor Logan though..I hope they talk soon

Author's Response: Yeah, I've really developed a liking for a lot of the mansion residents through reading fanfic, but 'Ro is definitely one of my favorites. There will be lots or Rogan interaction in the next chapter. ;-)

Reviewer: baybelletrist Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/21/2011 8:14:12 PM Title: The Garden

This is wonderful. I love the interactions between the various characters, and it's nice to see Xavier admit how badly he bungled the contact with Marie. Don't worry that it's slow; some very important shifts have happened in Marie's, Logan,'s and Xavier's thinking. That's momentous, if not flashy, and it's necessary for the characters to be able to move forward. Well done.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it! Yes, I've developed such an affection for the other mansion residents through reading other fanfics, it's fun to bring them into play. I'm glad that the Xavier part worked, I know he seemed really cold and manipulative at the beginning of this fic, and that's really not what I wanted him to be. He was really just too removed from the situation to understand what he was asking of Logan. Thanks also for the words of encouragement about "slow" chapters. At least the next one has a fair amount of Rogan in it!

Reviewer: justanji Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/20/2011 4:54:56 AM Title: The Storm

Hahahaha, I love drunk Rogue. She's buckets of fun... I'm hoping for more angst before the happy!

Author's Response: What? Angst? Me? Never! ;-) Be careful what you wish for...

Reviewer: justanji Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/20/2011 4:07:40 AM Title: The Procedure

Love the last line!! Also interesting "side effect" of Rogue borrowing people's mutations.. I like it!
~Anji

Author's Response: So glad you liked this! Yes, I'm very mean with Marie if she gets the power of mutations they also cause her quite a bit of difficulty. ;-)

Reviewer: litlen Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/19/2011 1:48:19 PM Title: The Storm

'parently Ah only fall for that seduction game once -- nah, make that twice -- in a lifetime."
“Okay. I’ll go. But Ah’m bringin’ the whiskey.”
‘For the first time she looked at Logan, his hazel eyes staring intently into hers, his expression unreadable. She looked back into Xavier’s eyes. “And he stays the hell away from me.”
Love the use of alcohol, the struggle with the emotions she’s feeling - hers and Logan’s and the way you’re depicting the betrayal. I foresee at some point Logan having to tell/make the prof back off –[in previous chapters he seemed a bit too keen on her abilities!] Or kicking major Magneto butt - He needs to do something! I think he’s got his work cut out trying to convince her where his heart is!

Author's Response: Aw, so nice to see the lines you liked! Luckily, I think Xavier has a revelation on his own, but Logan helps a bit. ;-)

Reviewer: Ally Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/18/2011 8:59:29 PM Title: The Storm

Oh, make him crawl, make him crawl! I loved this chapter. I thought you did wonderfully displaying Rogue's conflicted mental state--in fact, it was one of my favorite portrayals of this common state of her mind that I've read in the last few years.

Author's Response: Well, I don't know if Logan ever really crawls, but he will apologize at least, and suffer more than a little! ;-) I'm so glad you liked how the inner conflict played out.

Reviewer: alesia Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/18/2011 8:38:15 PM Title: The Storm

I can totally see why you are having problems with the next chapter. The decision as to how to have them make up is always pivital. I can see that Xavier has figured out how invested Logan is and how wrongly they approached her. I have this weird idea that Logan's scent will help her sleep but he is going to have to be near enough to her so she can smell him while she sleeps but far enough away she can't see him or know he is there.

Author's Response: Yeah, I've found that things really roll along when there's either events occurring or dialogue. Parts where characters just ruminate about stuff are very difficult! That's a neat idea about the sleeping...you'll have to write that one!

Reviewer: Wanderlust Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/18/2011 8:05:32 PM Title: The Storm

Great update! I like how you got them all directly to the mansion without a lot of back and forth ("Ah'm not goin'!" "Yes, you are." "No, Ah'm not!") nonsense. And I also like how Rogue let herself get angry when she reached the mansion and met the Professor, aka puppet master. She's not "Rogue" for nothing! Don't worry about the next chapter-- I have every confidence in your story-telling skills!

Author's Response: Thanks! I had all these elaborate scenarios for how she ended up at the mansion (her being saved unconscious from Magneto, etc.) but in the end, it seemed to work better for her to just go. And she may be angry, but she's not stupid, and I think if she called Xavier "Wheels" she got enough info to know that Xavier is at odds with Magneto, and if she had to choose between the two of them, he would be the better choice. Thanks for the vote of confidence. I can't claim that I love the next chapter, especially the beginning part that gave me such trouble, but it's done and the story is able to roll on!

Reviewer: Shuttlelauncher Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/18/2011 4:59:01 PM Title: The Storm

Oh poor logan....but Marie does deserve to have her ire! Really looking forward to the next chapter....I cant imagine how hard it must be to write a story so I won't pressure you too much, lol!

Author's Response: I'm glad to hear you say "poor Logan," it's been my concern throughout this fic that he is not coming across as likeable enough, so I'm glad to hear people feeling sorry for him! Luckily I got over the sticky point of the next chapter and things are coasting along again, so hopefully I'll update soon.

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