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[Report This]Date: 02/19/2014 9:42:40 PM Title: Chapter 3
Finally, Clio showed an actual emotion: she smiled. “She wasn't a woman.” Damn Coke hurts coming out of your nose!More please!!!!!!!!
[Report This]Date: 02/19/2014 9:29:52 PM Title: Chapter 1
I just stumbled across your wonderful story, it's a true pleasure to find a story on this site I haven't already read. I am enjoying it very much and just want to plead with you to finish this gripping storyline, I know there has to be more to the story...
[Report This]Date: 09/20/2011 3:12:17 AM Title: Chapter 3
And here are some more stars, for Chapter 3 this time. Are Charisma and Clio OCs? Looking forward to the next chapter.
[Report This]Date: 09/20/2011 3:10:41 AM Title: Chapter 2
I just realized that I only reviewed Chapter 1, so here, have some more stars. :)
I like that you're not beating us over the head with lablablab but rather getting the X-Men into position. There's only so much pain and suffering I feel like reading, even if it even Marie's story.
[Report This]Date: 07/26/2011 12:53:03 AM Title: Chapter 3
You know I'm loving this :D Might want to keep an eye on the formatting for wrfa, though ... are you uploading it by dropping a text file in a box, or by linking a file? I've found the former works best for me. And you deserve some stars, too!
Date: 07/25/2011 7:38:20 PM Title: Chapter 3
Very interesting, says Sera in a really bad draculian accent... ;)
Lots of stuff here, love how you continue to portray Ororo, especially in her interaction with Logan. Very honest. And those sisters? Wow. I could see them so vividly and their powers are so original!
You gave us such a big chapter, but it left me wanting another one ASAP!!!
Date: 07/24/2011 9:20:22 PM Title: Chapter 3
If good karma means you writing more, I'm all on board with that. So many threads being woven into this, I'm curious to see whatnyou end up weaving with them. Even your OCs are intriguing. I especially like the interaction between Logan and Storm, though she's my favorite X-man so that ain't too surprising. Still, you wrote it very well & hinted at a lot of depth and subtleties in the characters' feelings towards each other. Please keep up the good writing. I'm enjoying this story and look forward to seeing where you go with it.
Date: 07/24/2011 8:10:32 PM Title: Chapter 3
I love the depth of this story--- so much going on in people's heads, hearts, histories. And I will absolutely forgive the long delay... as soon as there's another chapter up! :)
[Report This]Date: 07/08/2011 10:09:29 AM Title: Chapter 2
So many juicy lines, snippets that line up exactly what the school has become since the loss of Jean and Scott. So perfectly worded. You still get me with a few zingers - there's a lot of them actually - but this one really made me laugh:
...a few rounds with one cage, two bottles, and three women.
Ain't that just him, though? So brilliantly written, and I wouldn't worry too much about chapter lengths (My fic is all OVER the place), you know when it's a good place to break off and start a new one. Like Jaq said, I am usually a few chapters ahead and after tinkering a bit with them, I start chopping off where and when they start and stop. Not that you need any advice, you are by far, a highly accomplished writer!
No worries in regards to your end notes - personally, I enjoy the more mature (and don't read that to only mean smutty) where the human condition is really explored. To me, it's all part and parcel of what life is full of.
You did an awesome job with fleshing out the characters - I already care so much for them! I am flinging tons of stars at you and "jonesing" for your next chapter! :)
[Report This]Date: 07/08/2011 10:04:20 AM Title: Chapter 2
Wow. The first chapter piqued my interest. But this one absolutely blew me away. I can't tell you the number of lines that drew a smile to my face, but especially these two: "While during the school year, he was perpetually annoyed, during the summer months, he was only inclined towards annoyance." and "gauging Kurt's emotions was about like contemplating the contents of a blueberry pie."
You've got a devoted reader here. I like this cocky, snarky, sarcastic Logan. Fun times! If the story stays this good, I'll even grit my teeth through a little femmeslash, heh ;)
[Report This]Date: 07/08/2011 4:38:55 AM Title: Chapter 2
This is a great chapter, really has me hooked. Your scene with Logan, Colossus and the runts was incredibly visual and the dialogue was perfect.
Lots of great lines too ... " While during the school year, he was perpetually annoyed, during the summer months, he was only inclined towards annoyance", just sums up Logan SO perfectly - I started cackling away. (Enough to make my husband look up from the Tour de France highlights!!!) "defence AND offence classes" ... same!
Don't worry too much about your word lengths - 1000 words is short, yes, but if you feel you need to write that, that the chapter stops there naturally, stop. Forcing it doesn't work. Similarly, if you want to write 5000 words, write that. Once things are flowing, its the story that counts.
A lot of writers actually like to have a few chapters up their sleeve, and that means you have the freedom to massage where one chapter ends and the next starts if doesn't feel right on the reread.
Happy writing, I'm really looking forward to more of this!
[Report This]Date: 07/08/2011 3:24:44 AM Title: Chapter 1
Oooh, I like it. This is a great start. I love your dialogue; you've captured the characters' voices very, very well. The way you move the narration back and forth through time seems like a parallel to Rogue's mental state. ("Callous" by skybound2 used a similar technique, with equal success.) Will we get to see into the heads of the lab personnel much more?
Date: 07/07/2011 2:00:59 AM Title: Chapter 1
This is great! Well-written, and very interesting! You scared me with your author's notes, though, if I have to wait three years for it or if it stays unfinished I will be mad!!!
Date: 07/05/2011 6:44:50 PM Title: Chapter 1
I really enjoyed this. Your writing style is smooth and very present-moment. I felt completely drawn in, to the point that it was even a bit difficult to read when Marie was getting prodded and jabbed! But the scene with Logan was very interesting. Can't wait to see where you take this.
Date: 07/05/2011 2:43:16 PM Title: Chapter 1
whoa! i hope they can save marie! great work so far, I hope you continue the story.
Date: 07/05/2011 1:27:59 PM Title: Chapter 1
Great great start! Thanks for making the switches between timelines so clear-- I sometimes have a hard time following those, but with this story it's not a problem. Please, update soon! I'm on the edge of my seat!
[Report This]Date: 07/05/2011 2:59:51 AM Title: Chapter 1
Wow, where did you come from?! This is FANTASTIC. Utterly, completely fantastic. I love how you interspersed the two time-lines, very clear, and you definitely got across the environment Marie finds herself in. (In the lab and while in the mansion after taking the original cure.) So many lines jumped out at me, but here are two that made me sit back and "feel".
Two of mutants—both of them with non-visible mutations-appeared to change their mind, and were allowed to leave the room, and presumably, the building.
That had me shivering. But I think this is my favourite:
...had jerked away from Bobby. "Don't touch me."
Irony.
I so enjoyed this and look forward to you continuing it. Oh, and thanks for the laugh, I SO hear you about the "ramblie" fics, LOL! Hey, you never know, you'll finish that first fic one day...but after this one, k?
:)