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Reviewer: Ebony10 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/23/2012 1:13:38 AM Title: The Revelation

Whoa! Talk about action packed!!!!! Amazing chapter- can't wait for next weekend! ;)

Author's Response: Glad you liked it! Thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: White Dove Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/22/2012 1:36:47 PM Title: The Revelation

ohhhhh I don't like that he put marie to sleep as well! that seems sneaky and like he is up to something! love your version of the power transfer here. I thought for sure he would have logan stab her! lol once again, great chapter, more please!!!

Author's Response: Yeah, I actually had a few different ways I planned to get Marie under control, but this actually seemed the most likely and expedient. I don't know that Xavier necessarily has anything sneaky planned, he just recognized that Marie was out-of-control and feral, and they had a disabled Logan to deal with already. Letting Marie drain or gut or whatever she had planned for Magneto would probably not be a good idea in the long run. As for Magneto, I don't think he planned to kill either of them, just toy with them a little. He knew Logan healed, but up until that point none of them knew that Marie could take on others' mutations. It made her a lot more interesting to Magneto -- I think he regrets "passing" on buying her now!

Reviewer: alesia Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/22/2012 1:02:09 PM Title: The Revelation

Boy that didn't go like Charles had planned at all. You have to wonder after an entire adult life dealing with Erik, Charles might learn to expect the unexpected and for things never to go right when dealing with Erik.

Logan is going to be pissed, at a number of people. :) This is going to be fun.

Author's Response: Yeah, in my mind Xavier is just a little too used to having situations under control, but when you add a telepathy-proof Magneto and relatively telepathy-proof Logan and Marie, that's way too many loose cannons. And, yeah, I don't think Logan will be too happy about how it all went down either.

Reviewer: MoonlightStorm Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/22/2012 1:01:21 PM Title: The Revelation

What a great way to end the chapter! Loved it.

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! And poor Logan, he seems to be passing out right and left in this fic, doesn't he? Oh well, not only is it canon that he gets a little comatose after a Marie-encounter, but I also didn't have a good way of stopping him from gutting an unconscious Magneto if he did stay conscious. Somehow I don't think he would have too many qualms about taking out even an unconscious elderly man if he had just hurt him and his girl. ;-)

Reviewer: Ebony10 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/15/2012 10:58:49 PM Title: The Wall

Ahhhhhhh! How does this just get better and better????

Loved this chapter! Ooh, is Marie gonna do something a little more hands on to hurt those who hurt her? Can't wait for more! This was my treat for getting about halfway thru a chapter of my thesis. :)

Author's Response: I'm so glad you're liking it! Marie is definitely going to get more hands-on, but it may not go the way she expected. ;-) And congrats on your thesis chapter!

Reviewer: WitchBaby Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/14/2012 11:15:57 PM Title: The Wall

love the complexity of your rogue. i've been in similar positions where you want something so bad one second and then the next you were wondering what the hell you were thinking. the need to run, escape, protect can become overwhelming at times. like 1 step forward, 2 steps back. i can't wait to see how things go between rogue and the prof, then her and logan, so excited!!! another *amazing* chappie, as always, please update soon!

Author's Response: I'm so glad you are liking Marie's character development. To be honest, I had no idea that she was going to have that panic attack, it just happened. ;-) Glad you're excited, hope the next chapter lives up to your expectations!

Reviewer: alesia Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/14/2012 10:49:00 PM Title: The Wall

Nice update. Logan is soo cute when he has a surprise. You can just tell he is fighting what he feels for her, he doesn't understand it or want to see it yet. I am not sure that Marie will gain much by going to Charles, he isn't going to let her run, even if she wants to.

Oh BTW, I can't wait for Owen's gift to drop some really good tidet about either Marie or Logan. It doesn't have to be the obvious but knowing he is going to come out with something grand just makes my little heart flutter.

Author's Response: Glad you liked it. Yeah, enthusiastic Logan is pretty cute, isn't he, just because it's so out of character. And by now you'll know what Marie requested of Charles...let me know what you think of it! As for Owen...I strongly suspect he is going to pop up again in the future.

Reviewer: hobbitsdoitbetter Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/14/2012 10:26:13 PM Title: The Wall

our girl's about to do something foolish, isn't she? (grins) still enjoying this... hobbits away, hey!

Author's Response: Always! I try not to make the characters do anything hopelessly stupid, I hope, but as for...impulsive? reckless? short-sighted? self-defeating? Bring it on!

Reviewer: Airin Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/08/2012 1:17:28 PM Title: The Retrieval

Strange boy...he's scaring me a bit. I have to admit I love "MeanJean getting her ass banged", but I also have to admit she wouldn't be a very interesting character so...well, I'm just trying to say I found interesting the interaction between Logan and Jean on the plane. The little scene between him and Marie made me "Awww" once more, so thanks a lot! Now she just have to drop her "I'm rotten, I'm crazy, I'm poisonous" role, and everything will be perfect...

Author's Response: Yeah, he is a little creepy, huh? I'm glad you liked the other side of Jean's character...although I have to say that "MeanJean getting her ass banged" sounds like a whole 'nother kind of fic. I think MovieMom is writing that one. ;-) Yeah, I agree Marie has to get over her poison skin complex, but where would our fics be if Marie and Logan weren't hopelessly insecure about their mutations? About a chapter long, probably. ;-)

Reviewer: Ebony10 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/08/2012 1:05:46 AM Title: The Retrieval

That was a great chapter. I'm really, really glad it doesn't seem like this guy was a creepy molester man. So anxious for the next chapter and find Kit and Jubilee!

Author's Response: Yeah, I am probably flinching away a bit from some of the grimmer aspects of human trafficking, but my rationale is that this black-market ring specializes in mutants, and so the individuals are generally being bought for their mutations rather than other nefarious purposes. Thanks for your review...glad you're still with the story, there have been some slow chapters!

Reviewer: baybelletrist Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/07/2012 11:24:02 PM Title: The Retrieval

What kind of turnaround time would you need for feedback? Things are kind of nuts for me right now. I could probably manage to do simple feedback, though -- if what you're looking for is "Hmm, this bit works for me but that bit seems out of character" or something of the sort.

I actually don't have an e-mail address for you, I don't think...? If you'd like to follow up by e-mail, I've got a gmail account with the same username I've got here, baybelletrist. :)

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks so much for your input. It has really helped a ton. :-D

Reviewer: hobbitsdoitbetter Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/07/2012 9:32:12 PM Title: The Retrieval

really enjoyable, and thanks for giving me a non psycho hose-beast jeannie- made my week. love ororo's voice too. happy new year!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review, and glad you found the chapter enjoyable! Yeah, I had never planned to make Jean so over-the-top bitchy, but I couldn't resist it for one chapter. My excuse was that she was just hella-mad at Logan (for the reasons outlined in this chapter) and she let it show uninhibitedly, but she was always going to show a saner side. :-) So glad you liked Ororo's voice too. Happy new year to you as well!

Reviewer: baybelletrist Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/07/2012 2:33:32 AM Title: The Retrieval

Yay, mean!Jean has left the building. I like it so much better when she's a three-dimensional character. :)

Good chapter. Marie's got to get over that "I'm poison" complex. Chop chop! ;D

Author's Response: Yes, Mean!Jean was fun while she lasted, but I could never leave her so one-dimensional like that. I just couldn't resist the impulse to make her balls-out bitch-on-wheels for one chapter, though! Yeah, Marie and her insecurities, and Logan and his. I'm a little uncertain about how I'm going forward with that. You wouldn't want to read a few chapters ahead and lend your opinion, would you? If so, please send me an email. I would definitely trust your judgment.

Reviewer: alesia Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/06/2012 9:26:21 PM Title: The Retrieval

I like the scene between Jean and Logan on the plane. It always amuses me that Logan is afraid to fly but it makes so much sense. I am glad the found Owen. It will be interesting what Owen has to say about Logan and Marie.

Author's Response: Thanks so much...I'm glad you liked the Jean. I know I made her a little bit of a caricature the first time we saw her, but I just couldn't resist. I had always planned to make her a more complex character ultimately. Yeah, I'm glad they're finding the other "sales" too -- both to get them out of the way of the plot, and to get to the big showdown!

Reviewer: Ebony10 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/05/2012 12:55:32 AM Title: The Connection

Whoa. Intense. Poor Rogue. :(
Great chapter. Little nervous about Logan going to see magneto on his own, but oh so interested in what's gonna happen next.

Author's Response: Yeah, Magneto and Wolverine never sounds like a good idea, does it? It'll take a few chapters before I get there, but hopefully it'll be worth it!

Reviewer: alesia Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/04/2012 12:28:24 PM Title: The Connection

Keep in mind as I write this I am the author with a 60k word story that is just now getting my characters out of their hotel room BUT I LOVE these kinds of character bits. I think they make a story more realistic and the reader doesn’t have to wonder “what does character A think of all this”. It is also really nice to see Logan and Marie through someone else’s eyes. Your Ororo is especially insightful. I find it wonder that you have decided that although Marie can access what she knows from other personalities she pays for it each time she does it. (This has always been Rogue’s tragic flaw, what has kept her from becoming the ultimate mutant unstoppable mutant.) Having her act and react like Freddy drives that point home with clarity and force. Well done.

Reviewer: alesia Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/04/2012 12:27:12 PM Title: The Connection

Keep in mind as I write this I am the author with a 60k word story that is just now getting my characters out of their hotel room BUT I LOVE these kinds of character bits. I think they make a story more realistic and the reader doesn’t have to wonder “what does character A think of all this”. It is also really nice to see Logan and Marie through someone else’s eyes. Your Ororo is especially insightful. I find it wonder that you have decided that although Marie can access what she knows from other personalities she pays for it each time she does it. (This has always been Rogue’s tragic flaw, what has kept her from becoming the ultimate mutant unstoppable mutant.) Having her act and react like Freddy drives that point home with clarity and force. Well done.

Author's Response: Ha, I don't think anyone is complaining about your characters not leaving their hotel room. ;-) I'm so glad you liked the chapter, and also the price Marie has to pay for the information she gains from absorbed personalities. Thanks so much for your review!

Reviewer: Airin Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/04/2012 7:51:50 AM Title: The Connection

Great chapter! You can write 40 or even 100 chapters, if they're all like this one! I really appreciate the way you show us their budding connection through Ororo's eyes:things are much clearer from the outside, aren't they? Since I love protective Logan, I was "Awwww" reading Ororo's description of his behaviour.
The second half was harder:Rogue seems so unselfish, so generous, risking her identity, facing a such cruel task to save complete strangers.
Can't wait for more!

Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it...I was so torn about whether it was an unnecessary diversion or if it added something useful to the story. Thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: Airin Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/04/2012 7:47:40 AM Title: The Call

Love this eleventh chapter, because I really like your portraits of Xavier (the "My children" line was great!) and Erik(I don't dare write his surname!. I'm deeply cuious about the connection between Erik and Weapon X, and absolutely love the final Logan and Xavier's line: "Fick", "Indeed". Well said.

Author's Response: So glad you liked it! You might have to wait a few more chapters before we get back to Weapon X's involvement, but I promise interesting stuff happens in the meantime!

Reviewer: White Dove Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/04/2012 2:56:08 AM Title: The Connection

ohhh an update! and such a good one too! thank you! i needed this. Great update. I loved seeing Ororo's perspective. It was very enlightening! more soon please!

Author's Response: Sorry to hear you needed cheering up, but glad I could help, and very glad you liked Ororo's perspective. Thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: Moviemom44 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/04/2012 12:43:03 AM Title: The Connection

Good heavens, but you are wonderful at this. 'Connection'. Too right. I absolutely LOVE that you chose Ororo to show us the connection that Logan isn't even fully aware of yet, but is glaringly obvious to anyone else who cares to look closely enough. And that nasty connection between Rogue and Freddy...comes in handy now and then, but God it's hard on new friendships, ain't it? Short, sweet and oh so revealing...another spectacular chapter. If they are all this good -- and why wouldn't they be? -- you go right ahead and write 40 chapters, darlin'. That'll be just fine with me. --Wendie

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad that you liked the Ororo part. I wasn't sure if the Ororo stuff actually added to the story or not. I'm so happy to have the encouragement!

Reviewer: Moviemom44 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/03/2012 10:49:33 AM Title: The Call

Love Logan's last line. His economy of language is so refreshing, don't you think? And speaking of language (there's a pun in there somewhere, I fear), you captured Xavier and Erik perfectly.

As regards Weapon X...Logan and Xavier thought they had problems with Freddy and the Brotherhood. Throw in Stryker and his crew and things are going to get complicated and ugly real fast. I can't wait to see how all this fits together, but i wouldn't be opposed to a smutty little Rogan interlude along the way. heh, heh. --Wendie

Author's Response: Yeah, it might be a little cheap to have Logan curse so much, but sometimes no other word will do. ;-) I'm so glad you found Xavier and Erik to have believable voices. And yes, I think Weapon X's involvement will make the Brotherhood look like old pals to the X-Men. And don't worry -- when I wasn't sure what the plot would be I had the caveat about possibly not getting to the smut -- especially since Rogue started out somewhat immature and vulnerable, and I didn't want to rush it and make it squicky. But now that it's shaping up to be a longer fic I'll definitely get the hot Rogan sex in there. You guys deserve it for all the reading you're going to have to do!

Reviewer: Ebony10 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/01/2012 2:39:03 PM Title: The Call

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHH!!!!!!

And I thought your other cliffhangers were harsh. lol. Wonderful chapter. Slow? Not at all. Nerve-wracking? You betcha!

I really like how Xavier really thinks of them all as family. "My children..."

Dammit. Logan's gonna go. I can't wait for more!! Thanks for this post! Happy New Year!

Author's Response: Aw...maybe it's mean to say, but I'm so glad you found this to be cliff-hangery! It really struck me as a chapter in which not much happens -- sometimes I really get frustrated with having to get characters fed and that kind of thing! Yeah, it's interesting, my husband got me into the X-Men comics, and I had never realized that Xavier had a child of his own. I had always thought that he was childless and had taken on the X-Men as his surrogate children. And of course Logan's gonna go -- what fun would it be otherwise! Happy 2012 to you too!

Reviewer: Kotaatok Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 12/31/2011 9:28:02 AM Title: The Merchandise

This one has had me at the edge. So want to know what is next. Rogue is tougher more edgier she has more complexity thanks to her survivor instincts

Author's Response: So glad you liked it! Thanks for the compliment -- tough, edgy, and complex is exactly what I was going for with Rogue's character. When I started I had as inspiration the little girl in "The Professional," and now having seen the "Dragon Tattoo" movie I think there's a little bit of Lisbeth in there too. Someone who has been forced by life to become smart and independent, but also a little emotionally immature and isolated/antisocial.

Reviewer: alesia Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/30/2011 11:33:09 PM Title: The Call

Slow??? Slow? Darlin' I wouldn't call this slow AT ALL. You had me on the edge of my seat the entire time. You have Erik's voice down, I could Ian McKellan doing that scene on screen as I read it. The pacing was great, the twist of power that is the signature of everything Magento does at the end. Perfect. I love it.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you didn't find it slow -- and that you liked Erik's "voice." At times I think I make him sound a little too much like Xavier, because the formality of their speech is so alike. Thanks again for reviewing!

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