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Reviewer: WitchBaby Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/30/2011 10:54:36 PM Title: The Call

oooo, exciting chappie!

Author's Response: Glad you thought so! Thanks for leaving a review. :-D

Reviewer: TrickyBusiness Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/30/2011 10:21:56 PM Title: The Call

Absolutely loved the new chapter! Can't wait for more of doctorg's masterful story telling!

Author's Response: Thanks so much -- so glad you're liking it! It's great to get positive reviews back, especially for chapters that seem less exciting or eventful than some of the "landmark" chapters I have in mind when I'm writing.

Reviewer: notmyself Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/27/2011 3:25:53 PM Title: The Secret

Thank goodness you can spell Magneto's name, cause I sure as hell couldn't. Also, your story is fantastic and I never want to stop reading it. It is captivating and arousing and enthralling and and and.

~Mia

Author's Response: Ha, funny you should say that, I actually spelled his name wrong too -- forgot that first h! I went back and corrected it. Happens to the best of us. ;-) Thanks so much for your lovely review!

Reviewer: notmyself Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/27/2011 3:17:33 PM Title: The Offer

My guess is that the little darling has already run into Lenscher and triggered a memory in the library at Xavier's. I wouldn't be so free and trusting either. Smart cookie. Make everyone think you are all about the money and looking out for yourself while still giving them everything you planned to in the first place and not having them ever expect more of you that that. Brilliant thinking. I love that your mind conjured up such trixsy fabulosity.

~Mia

Author's Response: Ha, you're definitely on the right track! And love "trixsy fabulosity." :-D Thanks so much for being such an awesome reviewer!

Reviewer: baybelletrist Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 12/20/2011 3:14:42 AM Title: The Secret

Heh. When you had Marie get so spooked over by the bookshelves, I wondered if she'd seen a picture of Erik and Xavier. Nicely thought out.

Author's Response: :-D I figured some people would have called that one. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: pepper-maroon Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/19/2011 10:58:16 PM Title: The Secret

Oooohhh...I was wondering about the sudden change in Marie's demeanor. The plot thickens!!!

-Pepper

Author's Response: Yeah, it's nice to know she wasn't just being a bitch for the fun of it, huh? For someone with trust issues I can see how she might jump to the wrong conclusion there. And yeah, I know the plot might be getting crazy complicated right now, but it'll all fall into place. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: pepper-maroon Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/19/2011 10:57:26 PM Title: The Offer

Love it!! Especially Marie telling off Jean...

Author's Response: So glad you liked it! Thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: justanji Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/19/2011 4:44:09 PM Title: The Lead

My heart was pounding during this chapter! I loved the way you wrote Rogue accessing "her" memories! Keep writing!
~Anji

Author's Response: Aw, thanks for the compliment! Glad you liked that -- it's a little different from how Rogue usually seems to "use" the personalities she's absorbed so I wasn't sure how it would go over. Thanks for the encouragement!

Reviewer: Airin Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/19/2011 8:48:35 AM Title: The Secret

So, as usual, just left a review on Ff.net and now I re-read last chapter here...I like so much how you described her flow of feelings and thoughts, building up the strenght and the courage to trust him(God, I hope I'm writing in intelligible English!), I like your twist, with the great entrance of the brotherhood! And, I always love protective Logan!

Author's Response: Aw, thanks so much for leaving reviews! I'm so glad you liked the chapter!

Reviewer: Artemis2050 Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 12/18/2011 9:15:10 PM Title: The Secret

Okay, you got me.

What happens next?

Author's Response: Hey, there! I had no idea you were still around! I love your stories...so excited that you're reading mine. :-D Thanks so much for the review.

Reviewer: Moviemom44 Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 12/18/2011 2:28:23 AM Title: The Secret

You might as well have hit me in the face with a brick. I'm that stunned by the revelation of what spooked Marie in the previous chapter. And while I'm at it, let me tell you I am at this very moment in total awe of your genius. What a completely original way to introduce the villain in the piece. And such a familiar villain that he almost doesn't even feel like a threat anymore, but by introducing him to us through Marie's eyes, we see him as the sinister SOB he really is...There was nothing wrong with the previous chapter, so nothing needs forgiving. Now, explaining, particularly explaining Marie behaving like she'd been betrayed somehow, that is another matter, and this chapter accomplished it brilliantly. Hitting the 'favorite' button now. --Wendie

Author's Response: Aw, I am so glad I managed to surprise you! And...hmmm...as for introducing the villain of the piece...is he, or isn't he? ;-) I'm glad this chapter felt like a good explanation for Marie's prior behavior, and so honored you felt it worthy of your favorites. Thanks so much!

Reviewer: hobbitsdoitbetter Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/17/2011 10:54:54 PM Title: The Secret

good chapter: really enjoyed the exchange of info and the new development. more please!

Author's Response: Very gracious of you not to start out your review with, "I called it!" because you totally did. ;-) Glad you liked the chapter, even if I couldn't surprise you. Thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: alesia Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/17/2011 8:07:50 PM Title: The Secret

Ah so it WAS Erik. I wonder if he is 'buying' muntants to find out who is running the show and stop them just like the X-men or if he is buying slaves. I had wondered if the kid with the flames was Pyro.

I find it really cool that this chapter's title is very much the theme of the chapter. The entire chapter is full of secrets.

Excellent. May your muse speak long and loud. :)

Author's Response: I had a feeling you were on the right track. ;-) And yes, I have a feeling Pyro will be making an appearance. So glad you liked it. Thanks so much for being such a great reviewer!

Reviewer: Ebony10 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/17/2011 6:23:45 PM Title: The Secret

WOW!!!

Excellent chapter! And so quick- thanks so much! :D You made my day. I can't wait for more...the plot thickens. ;)

Author's Response: :-D Glad you liked it...and that I could cheer you up. Hope your difficult days are behind you! And yes, the plot is definitely thickening...I better figure it out, huh?

Reviewer: WitchBaby Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/17/2011 5:18:24 PM Title: The Secret

ooo! ooo! ooo! i knew something was up! amazing update!!!

Author's Response: :-D Glad you liked it! Thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: Ebony10 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/17/2011 12:47:35 PM Title: The Offer

AAAAAHHHH! What happened???

I'm so curious! I hope we don't have to wait long for an update. ::hopeful face:: ...but of course, if we do, I'll live. :)

Loved tough Marie, even if something weird is going on...and, I admit, I like that Logan is more of the pursuer, wanting her to trust him and rely on him. And she is the runner. Oh, just satisfation. :D

Author's Response: Was that update quick enough for ya? ;-) Glad you're liking tough Marie. And yes, it's a nice change to see Logan asking Marie to stay, huh? Okay, that happens in the next chapter, but you get the idea. ;-)

Reviewer: Aoria Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/17/2011 11:52:58 AM Title: The Offer

Poor Marie. And Jean...oh, what a bitch. Wonder what'll happen next.

Author's Response: Yeah, I was a little unbridled with the Jean bitchiness. I swear her character will become more nuanced later, I just had to let go for one chapter. Thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: Airin Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/17/2011 8:20:06 AM Title: The Merchandise

I've just left a review on Ff.net and now I've just re-read this chapter here...I like it, really. marie irritates me just a bit, because she's acting bitchy, but I suppose everything will be clear as soon as weìll find out what she's hiding. Can't wait to read chap.10!

Author's Response: Ha...I agree with you, it does seem like Marie is being kind of randomly bitchy in this chapter. She does have a reason for being mistrustful, but also I like to think of her as being the person she would be if she hadn't met Logan and the others six years ago. She's a Marie who's been knocked around and toughened up by life for six years on her own, and that's going to give her some jagged edges. It also gives her some of that ruthlessness that Logan's already seen, though. She's a survivor.

Reviewer: MoonlightStorm Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/17/2011 12:22:23 AM Title: The Offer

Aww, poor Marie! Looking forward to seeing what happens next. :D

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing! :-D

Reviewer: Moviemom44 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/16/2011 11:53:40 PM Title: The Offer

I'm gonna go way out on a limb here and guess that one of the telepaths in that office sent Marie the message that has her defense system cranked up to DefCon One. And I don't think it was the bald fella in the wheelchair... Now the question is: What could Dr. McBitchypants have said that has Marie running scared instead of fighting mad? Chapter 10 can't get here fast enough for me! --Wendie

Author's Response: Hmmm...that would have been interesting! Nice theory. Chapter 10 got there pretty fast, hope it was at least close to fast enough for ya. ;-)

Reviewer: Moviemom44 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/16/2011 11:20:18 PM Title: The Bitch

Good luck on the whole 'breaking the connection' thing, Logan. But it will be fun to watch you try.

LOVE that he put Jeannie in her place right from the jump.

I'll be back for Chapter 9 later. Kids need to get to sleep... --Wendie

Author's Response: Yeah, we all know that "breaking the connection thing" is not happening, but Logan is always the last to know, isn't he? And, yeah, Logan standing up for Marie is always squee-worthy, isn't it? Night night kiddos. Hope you enjoyed Chapter 9!

Reviewer: alesia Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/16/2011 10:30:35 PM Title: The Offer

What happened? You have me thinking now, was it something Jean did? I don't think so, I don't think it is something Charles would have done, so it had to be something Marie saw. What could have been on Charles' bookshelf that would have made her freak like that?

Waiting for answers and going to reread for clues.

Author's Response: Ha, you are getting very warm. ;-) If you reread for clues, maybe you noticed that I did change a bit of a prior chapter. Hope the update came quickly enough to satisfy your curiosity. Thanks again for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: alesia Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/16/2011 10:21:17 PM Title: The Bitch

Okay first,your mean!Jean is great. Second, Marie's reaction to Jean is probably one of the best I have EVER read. That was perfect!

Oh Logan, Logan, Logan, silly man, there is no breaking this connection - ever. :)

I think how he threatened Jean is going to become the new standard. I could see it happening in my mind's eye and I cheered the entire time.

Author's Response: So glad you liked the Mean!Jean. And yeah, Marie, she's pretty upfront. In writing this character I try to keep in mind what would have happened if Marie had never met Logan six years ago. Instead, she's spent six years on her own, scraping by, building up her defenses. That's made her a lot grittier than the usual Marie. Immature in some ways (emotionally) but wise beyond her years on others. And, yeah, Logan is fighting a losing battle here, but we'll let him come to that conclusion on his own.

Reviewer: alesia Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/16/2011 10:15:22 PM Title: The Lead

I still have this inch in the back of my head that a)Jubes and Kitty aren't with these guys and b)this is going to be bigger and maybe even hit closer to house that any of the X-men are preparded for.

Author's Response: I'm not tellin'. Thanks so much for your review!

Reviewer: alesia Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/16/2011 10:13:03 PM Title: The Confession

This Marie has balls and I love it. She is thoughtful and brave but not rash. She is confident and mature but vulnerable as well.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you're liking this characterization. I feel like I'm missing the mark on the "mature" part, but I'm working towards it.

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