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Reviewer: hobbitsdoitbetter Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/16/2011 8:47:03 PM Title: The Offer

as always nicely done. i assume erik managed to screw things up without even being present- the man has a gift. looking forward to the next chapter. hobbits away, hey!

Author's Response: Sorry, I missed this review before. You got my number, though, with the Erik angle! Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: WitchBaby Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 12/16/2011 8:35:16 PM Title: The Offer

what the FUCK did xavier 'say' to her?! she was fine until her scent changed to panic and she was looking right at chuck when it did, so he must've of said something to her telepathically. that or like one of her psyches figured something out about the xmen that freaked her out. i'm so curious to see what happened and why she asked for those things. like logan said, it doesn't make sense.

this was *such* a good update!!! i love how strong your rogue is. most rogan stories have her immediately leaning on logan, him solving her all problems. i like how here she's true to lots of RL abuse survivors, very cautious and hesitant to give her trust. honestly, she's risked more than he has so far in their relationship. *she* broke them out, *she* saved his life by playing nurse, *she* accessed the memories of a sociopath to help him. sure he's brought her to the mansion and stood up to jean for her but that last bit marie wasn't around to see.

sorry, totally rambling. a sure sign i'm in love with a story! again, can't wait 'til the next update!

Author's Response: :-) Hope the next chapter satisfied your curiosity. Thanks so much for your review! Yeah, I feel like this Rogue is in some ways a reaction to the last, who was just so broken and lost that she really clung to Logan. I wanted this Rogue to be much more prickly and independent. I just hope I can keep her that way -- I'm having to resist the urge to make her all gushy about Logan. I mean...who wouldn't be? ;-)

Reviewer: Ebony10 Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 12/16/2011 12:54:20 AM Title: The Bitch

“Don’t you ever try to hurt what’s mine again.”

Okay. There was squeeing when I read that. A lot of it. :D Like an overexcited fangirl.

LOVE this chapter. I have to admit that Jean's character is this unique person that I can really like in fics or I can really hate. There are very few characters that I feel can go both ways, but I totally buy a Bitch!Jean as well as a Jean who more like a sister and friend...odd.

Again..."mine" ::melts:: OMG. I really can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Tee hee. I'm so glad I could make you squee. And aren't we all overexcited fangirls, really? I'm so glad you liked this chapter. I've always fallen on the side of barely mentioning Jean at all or having her be some vague nice person in the background, just because having major Jean/Marie tension doesn't seem helpful for the ultimate cohesion of the mansion. Lately, though, I've been reading some fantastic Mean!Jeans, between Romeo is Bleeding, a re-read of The Girl, The Private Dance, etc. I just couldn't help jumping on the Jean-haters bandwagon, at least for one chapter.

Reviewer: Amara Nevena Malfoy Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 12/15/2011 11:35:07 PM Title: The Bitch

Great job! I can't wait to see where this is going!

Author's Response: Thanks for your review! Hope you liked the updates. ;-)

Reviewer: Airin Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/15/2011 5:10:51 PM Title: The Merchandise

Following this story on FF.net, but I need to leave a comment here as well...Love this chapter, possessive Logan is too hot and sexy, I never get tired of reading it, and I like your smart and strong Rogue! Thanks for this!

Author's Response: Aw, thanks so much for leaving a review! Yeah, there's a special place in my heart for protective/possessive Logan. ;-) I'm glad you're finding Rogue to be smart and strong. That's always my goal. Thanks again for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: WitchBaby Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/15/2011 1:43:31 AM Title: The Bitch

oooo! i love this chappie! possessive logan is so hot! and i loves me some mean!jean, too! great update, can't wait to see what's next!

Author's Response: Ha, glad you liked my first attempt at Mean!Jean. I promise, she'll get more nuanced as the story goes on. I just had to break out the full-on bitch-on-wheels for one chapter. ;-) And yes, possessive/protective Logan is very hot. I suspect we'll see more of that guy.

Reviewer: MoonlightStorm Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/14/2011 10:44:38 PM Title: The Bitch

I get so excited when I see this has been updated! Loved it. :)

Author's Response: I'm so glad you're liking it -- thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: White Dove Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/14/2011 10:15:13 PM Title: The Bitch

ohh. Good one Marie! LOL Love her response to Jean. and OMG I absolutely am over the moon over Logan's reaction! Can't wait for more!

Author's Response: So glad you liked it! :-D Thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: pepper-maroon Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/14/2011 9:50:09 PM Title: The Bitch

Aptly put title for this chapter..hehe.

And no Logan! Don't you dare break that connection.

I never would have expected Wolvie to buy heels for Jeanie...never. And the fact that he did, cracks me up.

As for Jean, I'm all for a bitchy Jean especially when Marie and Logan put her in her place back to back.

Finally, as for Marie, I always like kick-ass kinda girl. She isn't afraid and is all real unlike fake plastic Jean. (I just never liked Jean Grey the character...I always thought she was too overrated.)

Fantastic update, as always!

-Pepper

Author's Response: Yeah, I had originally called this chapter "The Mansion," but "The Bitch" was just more fun. And, yeah, poor Wolvie, I did embarrass him a little. See my reasoning in the review below as to why he might have been willing to shell out for some Louboutins. In my mind it went something like, "Girls like shoes. Jean is a classy girl, if I get her classy shoes she'll totally sleep with me. Now I'm going to have a beer." And you're very right about Marie being real, and that being something that appeals to Logan. I actually had this whole tangent about how the animal in him hates when someone acts differently from how they really feel, but it just took away from the story. But I can really believe that to be the case, for a feral to find it very unnatural when someone lies.

Reviewer: atmd Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 12/14/2011 9:11:11 PM Title: The Bitch

Gotta say I'm with Jean on the whole slack-jawed, gaping thing. Bitch is right. Marie sure put her in her place, though.

There is something extremely amusing about Logan shelling out hundreds of dollars for a pair of heels for Jean. I actually reread that line, like, three times, just because it was so well-written. Funny and sad at the same time. Poor fella. We all know which head he was thinking with when he made that purchase...

Marie didn't exactly get the smoothest introduction to the X-Men, but I'm curious to see how she responds to the rest of them, as well as what role they play in bringing down this trafficking ring.

(P.S. Possessive, protective Logan is yum. But that kinda goes without saying, eh?)

Author's Response: Ha. Yeah, my husband got me reading the Ultimate X-Men series, and there's a part in one of the comics where Logan talks about getting tattoos to impress girls (and then of course they fade with his healing factor). I think there was even a fic inspired by that, "Doku," that I read long ago, but I hadn't read the comic at the time. Anyway, it stuck in my mind that Logan can be a player, and probably has more money than he can spend living at the mansion, and in a rudimentary "girls like shoes" reasoning he might be willing to drop a grand on some if he thought it might get Jean into bed. And feeling like a fool is probably not something that goes down well with Logan, so I suspect he was not as diplomatic when he told Jean to "knock it off" as he might have been once he realized she was just flirting. ;-)

Reviewer: baybelletrist Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 12/14/2011 8:47:12 PM Title: The Bitch

Mean!Jean is right. Yikes. Love, love, love Marie's comeback. No defenseless girl, she.

Author's Response: Yeah, it was a little overdone. But, in my conception, Logan probably was just summing up man-style when he recollected that he told her to "knock it off." I suspect he was a little less tactful in actuality. ;-) And hell hath no fury like a woman scorned, who sees the scorner show up a few days later with some hot new chick wrapped up in his jacket...

Reviewer: atmd Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 12/13/2011 7:25:12 PM Title: The Lead

Heh. I like tough, prickly Marie. You write her so well! It's gonna be funny if (when) Logan steps over the line and she puts him in his place.

Wow. That's a pretty slim lead, but better than nothing, I guess. I wonder what Logan will do with it.

This is turning out to be a great story, as always. You're like, incapable of writing badly, huh? I hope you've gotten over your writer's block, because I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: I'm so glad that you're liking this tougher, prickly Marie. I feel like I'm not settling well into the character, I keep wanting to make her all sweet and wobbly-kneed over Logan. :-) Speaking of next chapters....nah, I won't nag. Just know that I'm waiting. Not very patiently. ;-)

Reviewer: atmd Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 12/13/2011 7:09:21 PM Title: The Confession

It pained him, seeing her struggle like this, watching her slender little body shake with the force of it. Just let yourself cry, he wanted to say, except that the Wolverine didn’t say shit like that and she wouldn’t listen anyway.

Aww. That was my favorite line, for sure. Such a touching moment. You can just feel how much he wants to go hug her or something right then, and the restraint it takes not to. I'm liking the tension you're building between them. Not sure how to explain it, but it seems they've got a little bit different dynamic from the rest of your stories. Very cool.

I'm looking forward to seeing what information Marie gleans, and how they rescue Kitty and Jubilee. This promises to be a great adventure.

I can't wait to see what kind of trouble they get into (and hopefully out of).

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked that moment. I actually took it out and put it back in a few times, not sure if it was a little too much at that time. I agree, this is a pretty different dynamic between Logan and Marie, I'm glad you're liking it. I still feel like I'm trying to find the footing. Hope the rest of it lives up to your expectations!

Reviewer: atmd Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 12/13/2011 5:39:24 PM Title: The Key

She shot him a look like he was crazy. She pushed up onto her knees, reaching over the console into the back seat, and hauled up a briefcase. His briefcase, in fact. Fifty grand in cash.

“I take it back. You’re a fuckin’ genius, kid.”


Smart thinkin', Marie! And can I just say, I am very, very glad Logan has two eyeballs again. Not that we wouldn't love him regardless, but, y'know . . .

As far as the writer's block goes, I dunno where you struggled, but it was worth it because I loved this chapter. So many interesting details, not to mention the building of some serious unresolved tension...

Plot tension, that is. Tension in the, um, plot. Yeah.

Really wondering where the leak came from and how Marco got the lowdown on Logan. I hope it's not betrayal within the ranks =(. Although if it did turn out to be, like, Ororo or something, that would be . . . interesting, to say the least.

Go Marie, asserting your adulthood in the face of Logan's stupid self-control mechanisms! She really is a genius.

Author's Response: :-D Yeah, usually Logan is the one taking care of business, I like the idea that Marie was out and doing useful things (bringing the car around, stashing the cash, covering up in Logan's jacket so he didn't accidentally touch her skin) while he was out cold. Tee hee. The struggle came with the next few chapters, so hope you liked those also. And yes, plot tension. That's always what I'm working towards. I don't have anything else in mind, at all. ::whistles innocently::

Reviewer: pepper-maroon Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/11/2011 6:05:58 PM Title: The Lead

X-men coming to the rescue! Take that you evil son of a bitches!!!!

I have to be honest, I usually go for fluffy, foofy, humorous fics because I need a good laugh or something...

But every now and then, a fic with beautiful character development like this one comes along that baits me and I'm stuck. (in a good way :)) Even foofy stuff won't help me unless I know what happens here. That just means you'll have me thinking up all these scenarios about what's happening with Kitty and Jubes and all the Rogan buildup until your next update.

Damn...

Thanks,
-Pepper

Author's Response: Hi there! Thanks so much for the compliment! I'm so glad you're reading, and I hope that I can keep you hooked! ;-)

Reviewer: Ebony10 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/11/2011 3:04:17 PM Title: The Lead

Wow. You wrote that amazingly (not surprised). I wish I could leave a more coherent review but it's been a rough couple of days. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter- it's getting me through horrible school stuff. :) Thanks!

Author's Response: Aw, I'm sorry you've had a bad couple of days. Hope you're past that now. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, despite all your massive amounts of homework!

Reviewer: Moviemom44 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/11/2011 10:55:06 AM Title: The Lead

I love that Wolvie thinks words like 'adorable' even if he wouldn't be caught dead saying them out loud. Well, not in public anyway.

I'm dying to know who is behind all this and I'm so looking forward to Logan making them pay oh so dearly for it. --Wendie

Author's Response: Ha, that's true, I don't quite see "adorable" coming out of his mouth. As to who is behind it all...it'll be another couple of chapters before you find that out, but I'll try to keep you entertained in the meantime.

Reviewer: Aoria Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/11/2011 10:29:17 AM Title: The Lead

>>>Her voice was wobbly again when she spoke. “What if we can’t find them? What if they’re just...gone?”

He couldn’t suppress the growl that welled up from his chest at the thought. “We’ll find them. And we have help.” He squeezed her against his side. “I think it’s time for you to meet my friends.”

Author's Response: :-D Does that mean you liked that part? Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: White Dove Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/10/2011 10:49:58 PM Title: The Lead

LOVE this story! Always so excited to see an update! Glad Marie is though through this. She is a survivor to her core. She might have moments of vulnerability but she has a core of strength in her. Love how you show it here.

Author's Response: So glad you're liking it! I'm glad that Marie is coming across as strong-but-vulnerable. That's always what I'm going for, but I think in the last story I went too far to the weak side, and in this one I've been worried at times that I went to far to the prickly/bitchy side. :-D

Reviewer: Katya Jade Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 12/10/2011 10:07:08 PM Title: The Lead

Loved the description of Marie calling on Freddy's memory. Logan is going to turn these guys into shish-ke-bob.

Author's Response: Glad you liked the memory-recall scene...wasn't sure how that would fly, it's a little different from how Marie usually seems to have access to memories in other stories. Thanks, as always, for your wonderful reviews!

Reviewer: baybelletrist Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 12/09/2011 3:55:56 AM Title: The Confession

“I think...I think that you wouldn’ta told me if you weren’t gonna do it.”

Oh, Marie, ILU, you awesome tough girl. ;) I like the chapter. And you made Jubes a med student! Woo! Chica's got no shortage of brains. I actually can't wait to meet your version of Jubilee -- I've always liked her. Actually I'm betting she's earning her nickname of "Firecracker" right about now.

Author's Response: Yeah, I'm tempted to take a side trip to check in on Jubes and Kitty...still not sure if I'm going to or not. Glad you're liking Marie. Hope you continue to do so as she gets a little less prickly.

Reviewer: Moviemom44 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/08/2011 8:48:46 PM Title: The Confession

You always come up with some new and fabulous way of telling me what I already know and making it seem fresh. I knew all that about Marie's mutation, but when she was telling Logan for the first time, it was like I was learning the truth right along with him.

Favorite line: "Just let yourself cry, he wanted to say, except that the Wolverine didn't say shit like that and she wouldn't listen anyway." Outstanding! -- Wendie

Author's Response: Aw, that's so sweet! I always think that Marie explaining her mutation is always the hardest part of the story, because the reader knows it all but it takes a lot of explaining for her to tell it to Logan. Logan's is so much easier, he just pops the claws, says "I heal, darlin'," and then growls a bit and you're done. ;-)

Reviewer: Ebony10 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/08/2011 12:39:38 AM Title: The Merchandise

P.S. Feel free to consult me about any Japanese if you ever want Logan to speak some. I'm happy to use my powers for good (rather than the evil homework ;P ).

Author's Response: I have no plans for them to go jetting off to Tokyo, but I'll definitely call on you if I do!

Reviewer: Ebony10 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/08/2011 12:36:53 AM Title: The Confession

I can't believe you ended it there. HOW RUDE!! lol, jk. Well, kinda. Argh, I can't wait to read the next chapter. This was so good. Poor Marie. But damn. She's so brave and awesome in this story. And I just love the way Logan is with her. (actually I always love the way you write the two of them, no matter what nuances are changed in their personalities)

Wonderful chapter and I can't wait to read the next one! I hope that it won't give you too much trouble...Ew, having to relive the horrible Logan-torturing experience. Yuck. But trying to save Kitty and Jubilee is so worth it. sigh...oh the dilemma...anyway, I look forward to the next installment! :D

Author's Response: Sorry! I'll try to get the next chapter posted this weekend at the latest. I'm glad you're liking this version of Marie/Logan. And you're right, reliving the torture of Logan won't be fun, but Marie knows what Kitty and Jubes are going through, and she knows she needs to help them.

Reviewer: WitchBaby Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/07/2011 10:38:23 PM Title: The Confession

i hope wolvie realizes exactly how hard this is gonna be on her. channeling a couple of sociopaths so she feels what they felt, that's asking a lot of person. great update!!!

Author's Response: Yeah, but that's why Wolvie is being such a sweetheart here...he doesn't ask. He leaves it up to her. It won't be easy, but she's a tough chick. :-D

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