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Awwww, that was awesome! You used such wonderful evocative imagery! I could really see that room in the back of the bar, all smokey, filled with men telling lies about what and who they've done. And I could really feel Logan's sense of loss at the idea that he will never have Marie the way he wants. But I can't help but wonder why? Is it the typical she's-so-young-and-I'm-just-a-old-horny-old-man thing? Or is it the she's-so-pure-and-I'll-just-corrupt-her bit? I wish we had a companion piece with Rogue's feelings. All in all, it was a great read!
This was so sweet.
*fans self* fantastically hot! and really sweet there at the end. Very nice!
Love this story!
Deeply deeply impressed. The angst just hit me...
Warm and cuddle-y juxtaposed against what he sees as the hard, cold facts of what he cant' have.... wonderfully done.
Frustration never felt so good. --Wendie
Ahh - such a beautiful ending to a lovely little fic. very nicely done x
I loved the question, "Whose the best you could ever have?"
Logan and Rogue's interaction was adorable. Great job!
Umm... Categories? Check. Series? Check. Genres? Check.
Feedback welcome? Hmm.
Well, if you didn't want any, tough luck, you're getting it anyway ;-)
Loved how it alternate between short, descriptive passages and conversation. Perhaps there is a little too much description sometimes: "Logan was in his sleeveless undershirt at the card table and the other guys were in short sleeves". You capture the feel of the scene so well, I'd say you can dispense with being overtly detailed.
The late-night/early morning feel about the setting comes across really well.
It seems almost fairy-tale'ish ("Pete the plumber") black-white in the way Logan's poker company and Rogue are set off from each other (late in the night and very early in the morning; the loud backroom of a bar and the quiet bedroom; the grime in atmosphere and "ideas" in the one and the sleepy kindness in the other, etc). The one-track conversation and the fairly conservative shot at the roles of all protagonists nicely underlines the fairytale feel.
Logan is the only one who crosses from the black to the white (with a shower and linen).
Wonder why he doesn't act on his love? Also wonder if it would be a good idea. His fantasies about her are strictly backroom, and that whole paragraph breaks the flow of the whole thing a bit - it reads a little out of character (of the story, certainly not Logan's). But that might be just me.
Great! how he gives up his "title" to Rogue - your summary sentence is absolutely the filet part of this story.
Thanks for sharing!
BC