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Reviewer: Ebony10 Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/12/2011 8:48:33 PM Title: The Contact

I really love this story. I've been reading on this site for at least a year now, I think, and I just joined as a member because I felt that I had to review your work. I've loved everything of yours that I've read- you're a very talented author. I can't wait until the next part!

Author's Response: Aw, that is the best compliment I've ever heard. Thanks so much for joining, and reviewing! :-D

Reviewer: Tamana Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/12/2011 5:59:19 PM Title: The Experiment

Thanks for the quick updates!
So.. Hold on a sec.. Did I misunderstand anything or did you make Bobby gay?? He was hot for Pyro??
I'm a little confused. But I loved the Bobby meeting Marie accidentally. I wonder how Logan's gonna make things right when Marie realizes Logan's just like Bobby!

Author's Response: Yep, Bobby and Pyro, sittin' in a tree. K-I-S-S-I-N-G. I'll totally blame the fanfic world for that, I never really thought that about them from the movies but I've read so many fics where it was the case that I just assume now. ;-) Plus, I like having an explanation for why Pyro is so sullen. He's just hiding his wounded feelings, poor little firebug.

Reviewer: JaqofSpades Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/11/2011 11:51:27 PM Title: The Experiment

Awwww. Sweet. I'm enjoying the alternaverse you've got going one - Bobby goes Brotherhood, Pyro stays behind etc. Be interesting to see how that plays out in future.

Author's Response: I'm glad you're liking it! Yes, Pyro always struck me as the more interesting of the two, so I figured I'd keep him around. ;-) And I like the idea of a Marie-Bobby dynamic having played itself out but in an alternate way.

Reviewer: Shuttlelauncher Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/11/2011 8:38:53 PM Title: The Experiment

He is in sooooooooo much trouble! Marie is going to be one pissed of lady when she finds out what Logan was sent to do. Love love the story, great job!

Author's Response: I'm so glad you're liking it! Hope I haven't made you late to work again. ;-) Thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: Oracle13 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/11/2011 8:16:44 PM Title: The Experiment

Sorry, I accidentally hit the submit button (damn smart phone). Anyway, I really love how their relationship is going--trusting each other with their nightmares/memories. And Logan telling her that she is no longer alone was fantastic. I also liked how you didn't use the usual Logan-wakes-from-his-nightmare-and-stabs-Rogue scenario. Instead you gave it a nice little twist. Nicely done!

Author's Response: Yeah, I think that's the value of an older, somewhat wiser Marie. She knows to stay the hell back when someone wakes up clawing. ;-) I'm glad that you are liking the development of their relationship so far. THanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: Oracle13 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/11/2011 8:07:30 PM Title: The Experiment

Can I just say that your fast updates totally rock?! I really enjoyed this. Good backstory with Bobby and Eric. Logan's going to have a really hard time getting her trust back when she finds out that she was set up again in virtually the same way as before.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you like the backstory. And enjoy the fast updates while you can, I seem to be hitting a bit of a block after chapter 8. :-D Yes, it is a hard road ahead for these two.

Reviewer: serafim Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/11/2011 7:14:20 PM Title: The Experiment

That twist about Bobby not saving himself to save her? BRILLIANT. So, so sad! The guilt poor Marie has, its painful to read. Logan is sweet, very giving, I almost want you to be gentle when she finds out he's mislead her. Almost. ;) Great story so far!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the thing with Bobby. Yeah, I'm surprised how much I'm feeling for both Logan and Marie in this fic. Especially in the next chapter...they're just in such a difficult situation. :-/ I'm so mean to my poor characters! Lucky thing I always give them a happy ending, or I'd have some bad karma headed my way. :-D

Reviewer: baybelletrist Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/11/2011 6:38:22 PM Title: The Experiment

Oh, Bobby. That's so sad. :(

Your Magneto seems to me more evil than the one in the movies. Movie-Magneto believes in mutant supremacy, yes, and he's done some very bad things, but he's never seemed like a sadist to me, just someone who believes in victory at any cost. But for this story it works.

The tension you're building keeps ratcheting up. It's really going to hurt.

Author's Response: Yeah, it was a little more diabolical. But it never did make sense to me that Magneto was just willing to take it on faith that he could give Rogue exactly enough power to use her but not enough to permanently harm himself. I mean she almost took Logan out in a few seconds, and she put her boyfriend in a coma for three weeks, and yet Magneto is up and bouncing around minutes later. It makes more sense to me that he would try to get a feel for how long her mutation takes to suck someone dry. And if he is willing to sacrifice one innocent young person, it's probably not that different to sacrifice two, especially if the second is a "traitor".

Reviewer: Solidae Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/11/2011 6:33:41 PM Title: The Experiment

When is this shoe gonna drop? I'm excited and scared for the inevitable...

Author's Response: Next chapter. :-)

Reviewer: litlen Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/11/2011 1:24:51 PM Title: The Attraction

Nooooo….not enough, just getting in to it and it stops! Love your guarantee though so I’ll be holding you to that and impatience at your posting is fine by me! ‘I'm actually writing faster than expected, so if y'all promise not to be stingy with reviews, I'll try to update twice a week if I can’ again fine by me – you post it, we’ll review it x

Was laughing my socks off at the roadside attractions which people obviously [For some reason I can’t fathom] actually visit! We have the real Stonehenge for those who want to stare at a bunch of rocks and these days you have to pay just to see them from a distance – If Missouri wants em they can have em, though maybe we should keep them as I don’t think we have any giant fruit or veg to compensate, though we do have quite a few giant chalk hillside carvings of figures and horses and no I don’t have a clue why!

Great set up – liked Logan’s observations and assumptions at the start, then we had Marie’s suspicions, Logan’s concern, mutual attraction - all the bases covered! Loved the text messages, I foresee the shit hitting the fan there ;) and in your words I think that means ‘Goddamn messy’ !!

Loving it so far, keep up the good work x

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! Yeah, the roadside attractions thing was two-fold -- I didn't want Logan and Marie to get to New York too fast, and also it was inspired by a trip I took with my college roommate to look at graduate schools, where we did that exact thing. We even went to a pecan farm, although sadly the World's Largest Pecan doesn't actually appear to be on one, I took artistic license there! I'm glad the beginning worked. It seemed artificial to me to have Logan just thinking, "Hey, I'm suddenly attracted to Marie!" but I really wanted to keep things moving along, and showing their attraction grow slowly over days and days just seemed like...a lot of work. ;-)

Reviewer: Oracle13 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/11/2011 10:01:58 AM Title: The Attraction

Oh, BTW, I'm glad that you said that you're impatient to post because I'm impatient to read more! ;) What can I say? I'm hooked!

Author's Response: Well, then I'm posting early again just for you!

Reviewer: Oracle13 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/11/2011 9:52:28 AM Title: The Attraction

Wow, what a sweet chapter! I really love the connection they have with each other. Logan definitely has it bad for her. I'm glad that he told Xavier that he needs to tell her and I love how he corrected Xavier by stating again that her name is Marie when Xavier referred to her as the "target". I really love how he cares about her and is protective of her--how it disturbed him that someone tried to hurt her and how he wished he could have been there to stop it. The kiss and the "worth the risk" line were so sweet and perfect! I can't wait for your next post.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you're liking it, and that the attraction is coming across. And that you caught the reason Logan no longer wants to call her the "target." :-D

Reviewer: Solidae Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/10/2011 7:31:13 PM Title: The Attraction

Dig that hole!!

Author's Response: Yup, he's digging fast with all six claws. ;-)

Reviewer: LeeMinKyo Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/10/2011 5:55:21 PM Title: The Attraction

Me likes. Me *LOVES* it!

This story is sooo good. I like the way Logan acts around Marie, the way he feels so attracted to her.

I canīt wait to know what happened to her in the past, and of course, I canīt wait to see a protective Logan.

Keep going! This is very good. If reviews make you update this fanfic sooner I will write a daily review. xD

Desperate much? Damn right!

Author's Response: Aw, I'm so glad you're liking it. Yeah, I had a lot of trouble with the beginning of this chapter, it seemed lazy to have Logan just thinking, "Hey, I'm attracted to Marie now!" but I didn't want to make the reader go through a different million events where he slowly realizes it. Next chapter will answer all your questions about the past, I think. Thanks so much for your reviews! Considering I had no idea where this fic was going at first (or actually a lot of times in the middle), it's actually going really quickly. I just finished chapter 8, and I'm not very patient, so I should be updating every few days or so. ;-)

Reviewer: alesia Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/09/2011 8:32:30 PM Title: The Attraction

Oh I am worried that there will be several F*yous from Logan for Charles before this is all over. Charles needs to pay more attention to what Logan is not saying. The kiss was beautiful.

Author's Response: Yeah. Maybe I was a little influenced by Sahara's wonderful story, where she points out how oblivious Xavier can be when he can't use his telepathy. And just his luck, both Marie and Logan are "immune."

Reviewer: Melancholy Rogue Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/09/2011 8:24:55 PM Title: The Attraction

"But some things are worth the risk."

Gosh, I love that line! What a great little chapter! :)

Author's Response: :-D Thanks so much -- so glad you liked it.

Reviewer: baybelletrist Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/09/2011 8:19:34 PM Title: The Attraction

Oh, I can see that heartbreak coming. :( The windup is actually excruciating, which means you're doing a damned good job. I eagerly await the next chapter.

Author's Response: Yeah. There's a whole lotta pain coming down the road for both Marie and Logan. What can I say, I love the angst! ;-) Next two chapters are big ones, I can't wait to post them!

Reviewer: JaqofSpades Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/09/2011 6:19:39 PM Title: The Contact

Just came back to give you some stars. Because you deserve them.

Author's Response: Aw, thanks, darlin'! ;-)

Reviewer: JaqofSpades Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/09/2011 6:17:06 PM Title: The Attraction

Awwww. So sweet. There's something about your tone in this (chapter in particular, and story in general) that is very gentle and warm. You captured that warm, blissful feeling of a warm car and relaxed company perfectly.

One small niggle - "He was built for stealth, not subterfuge." Are they not the same thing?

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the compliment. I love warm cars and roadtrips, so hopefully that's what came across. To me, subterfuge is trickery, deception, strategems, that kind of thing. Logan's M.O. is to go in quiet, do the job, and get out -- stealth. The way this mission is playing out with the lying and manipulation to me is subterfuge, and he's not cut out for it.

Reviewer: JaqofSpades Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/09/2011 7:30:58 AM Title: The Agreement

Ooh, that's just mean. Poor Rogue, all manipulated like that. Loved the warm tone of the last two chapters, the slow trust that is building between them, even if Logan isn't being honest. He's going to pay. *nods* Really enjoying this!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! Yes, he will pay dearly. Poor Logan, I actually just finished that chapter and I feel for them both. Hopefully the readers will feel the same.

Reviewer: skybound2 Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/08/2011 8:43:07 AM Title: The Agreement

Oh, this one is going to be a trip, I can tell! I really like the dynamic you have going between Logan and Marie in this one, and how she is growing to trust him, when she really probably shouldn't (at least he's a good guy in this one though, which is a plus - though I doubt Marie is going to see it that way!)

Kinda can't wait to see which ball of twine they go see, is that weird? Looking forward to more :-)

Author's Response: So glad you're liking it! And I can definitely promise that in the next chapter you'll find out which ball of twine they saw. ;-)

Reviewer: Oracle13 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/08/2011 5:26:37 AM Title: The Agreement

I'm really loving this! Logan is a smooth operator, but is he getting a little too close to his "target"? BTW, I liked the twist with the bike. I wasn't expecting that. The "not Scott" line makes sense now. I loved the fact that he was able to get one up on Scott by having a legit reason for getting his bike torched. LOL! I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: I'm so glad that you're liking it. And that you didn't see the bike thing coming. :-)

Reviewer: Melancholy Rogue Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/08/2011 12:58:53 AM Title: The Agreement

Dang, poor Marie is being played. :/ I don't think she's gonna be too happy when she find out. Great chapter, though. :)

Author's Response: Yup. :-)

Reviewer: alesia Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/07/2011 11:58:26 PM Title: The Agreement

I would NEVER have expected Logan to have lied to Marie about who trashed the bike. Marie is going to be way PISSED. This is going to be fun to watch. It will be interesting to see if the people who Marie referred to as looking for her aren't the baddy Brotherhood as we all assumed but our angelic little X-men. This is going to be really interesting.

Author's Response: Yeah, it's been hard, because I think Logan is not a sneaky guy by nature. That said, he is a professional badass, and I don't think it's like him to get squeamish if there's something that needs to get done to achieve an objective. I think in a situation like this, he'll play it as straight as he can, but if he has doubts he'll keep them to himself until it's time to act. As for whether it's the Brotherhood she's running from or not... Chapter Six will tell ya.

Reviewer: Solidae Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/07/2011 11:03:10 PM Title: The Agreement

He just keeps digging the hole, doesn't he? She is going to be so pissed when she finally figures out he is not who she thinks he is.

Author's Response: Ayup. ;-)

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